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Pink Champagne In Coffee Mugs
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Pink Champagne In Coffee Mugs |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Pink Champagne In Coffee Mugs through yellow trees and tagging earth through cups of times ago through tangled scenes and tripping sky through drips of all I know. ~ pink champagne in coffee mugs ash trays made of shell windows salted tightly plugged release me from this hell. ~ through dancing bruise and seeping life through hauls of nevermore through stabbing words and sharpened knife through seeds in resting core. ~ blinding sounds escaping night filthy feet in wool stale air suffocating sight save me from this deadly pull. ~ through surfaces scratched and torn through tattered means of sleep through mazes of my faces worn through promises I keep. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-30-2000).] |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I really enjoyed reading this i though that it was very well written and sort of "out there" with the words you were using but that is why i liked it, thank you for sharing "There is no always forever-just this-R.Smith broken glass never cuts the way it should-Gin |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Another fine definition of all things Dark Passions. Good work. ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Spit Fire......phew the intensity of this poem blew me away...I don't know what to say. I want to grab a hold of you and take you to that porch of yours out into the sun. Another great poem. Take care, big hug and smiles ~  "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Spitfire--this is just excellent...had a 'sub-conscious' flow, a dreamy quality...dark? sure--but I LOVE the dark...grins... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Spitfire...ditto all the above but especially brian and serenity...loved it... jwesley |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
SF...What a mind!! What a fabulous mind!! To be able to conjure up such images..and transfer those images to these pages...how incredible!! Hardrock |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
I have a lot of mugs to fill! Will you help drink the Champagne? It might take all night and we could make some poetry? Or we could just go for a swim in the ocean or both. I wanna ride the sea horses with you!! And get cot in a swirl!! How do i give you a hundred votes? See you at the bottom!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Amazing use of words. There are so many images floating in here, very cool, very interesting. (And I used to drink pink champagne in coffee cups, in the garage, with a cowboy, and loved every second of it.) |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Pink Champagne in Coffee Mugs, Loved the title, and the ability to grab all those images and write them like this!! Excellent job here!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Awesome work here hon, meanderings at their finest, I'm kind of speechless here just ditto all the greats and unreals! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have so intricately woven your words into a feeling with originality and depth. Very well done! |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I think you just topped yourself, SF! (If thats possible!) I adore this poem, with all its contradictions in the descriptions. (Pink champage in coffee mugs, for an example) Exellent work! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Fandabbydozy, Fire! What else can I say. I am amazed! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
So deep and intense, yet sensitive this is. Enjoyed it very much. |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
SF, Whew... What words of intencity. On top of what everyone else said, Whats left too say. Keep up the great writing, Darlin` LarBear |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Here I am back at the bottom again! Have to put this one back up again! Who here votes for Pink Champagne? Bubblies for everyone!! |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i vote!! there is nothing i could possibly add that wouldnt echo everyone elses replies! i will be back for more! whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Dear SpitFire Wow wow wow wow wow! This is just superb! The juxtapositions, and imagery amazing. You have a real real talent. Do grace us with more. Keep it up. Blessings Sylvia |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fire, You've done it again. Wonderful fabulous amazing. It's got my vote. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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