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Shades of Sky |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA 
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Shades Of Sky Have seen the moon go through changes Phased, eight times and blue. Have seen the stars reign in night sky And beam their lights on you. Have seen the sun give warmth of shine And rise up "all" each morn. Have seen the clouds that cover all When shadowed thoughts are born. All in all and now and then When eyes lift to the skies, The moon, the stars, the sun, the clouds In dreams, are made by I. When moon does talk to heart of me It swells the love inside, And opens up for all to see And nothing, can I hide. When stars do talk and glow my life I twinkle with the feel, Of happiness when dreams have turned The fantasy to real. When sun does talk, it's warmth of skin And tans my pale to dark, Energized, my mind becomes A difference seen, quite stark. When clouds do speak and blanket lay My days then shadowed, be. Hence, hoping for that gentle breeze To float them out to sea ... The light of moon and stars and sun Shines bright to lift me high. But when those clouds come drifting in ... That darkness, shades my eyes. MMoonchild Maureen Scully *99 |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
hey i really liked this poem...the way you wrote it was kewl...great job! ~MiSeRyDivine~~ |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
I agree...a great job!  EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Misery and DJLI thank you both..I am glad you enjoyed ~~softly Maureen |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your line breaks were done very very well, I love the way it started out with the two stanzas and then went to four, it all fit. The words were stunning, this is classic poetry, in my opinion, done at it's best! Kathleen |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Kathleen I have no idea where you came from..but I am enjoying all your comments and thank you so much for reading and responding ~~soft smiles.. I have an innate sense of rhythm and rhyme and line breaks, I have been told by those more creative then I... Maureen |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Maureen, where did I come from? well I showed up about 50 years ago! No, seriously, I've been a member of Passions for about 5 or 6 months, but I don't remember reading any of your poetry and I'm sorry about that, I feel so in tune with it and I had to respond and tell you how much I enjoy your natural rhymn and feel for the craft. Kathleen |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Maureen, I agree, this is richly done, and I love your work!! I voted on this, just a fantastic job!! Hope to see more! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I was teasing Kathleen..it's just I hadn't caught your writings in the almost month I have been here...and now I see you under all mine *s and Deborah thank you also for your kind words and voting...I am just happy when someone enjoys or can sense what I am feeling when they read my work ~~soft hugs to you both Maureen |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful poem!!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
PdV..thank you for the wonderful ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Lovely Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
thank you, Jamie..your visit is appreciated ~~softly Maureen |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Shades of Sky Gets my vote |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
insect...I love your rainbow shades... thank you Maureen |
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