Dark Poetry #2 |
crossroads |
Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
This spot right here in my soul Is the crossroad between Love and hate Stuck out on this branch as bait so at this crossroad I Wait I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Ooh.... succintly put. I like it |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Jeremiah, I like the crossroad imagery that you use here. Love and hate, so far and yet so close. How often one can become the other. Great stuff! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Hey JJ this is great, I like the bait on a branch like Huck Fin. So what will take it?? hate or love.?? Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Thank you all for your replies. i'm just trying to do my part here. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Short, but very powerful. I'd kind of like to see a sequel. =) This poem reminds me of a little story I heard about an old Indian chief That said (the quote will be off, it was a long time ago that I heard it :P) that inside of him were two dogs; one was vicious, mean, etc; and the other was kind, gentle, patient, etc; and that they were constantly fighting each other. When asked which dog one, the old man thought for a minute, then replied "The one I feed the most." That little story spoke volumes to me. "Suicides have already betrayed the body. Still born, they don't always die, bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet that even children would |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem was interesting to read...how long will you wait? I wanted to name my second son Jeremiah Johnson and my wife said no way...so he is Jeremiah James.... james |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Jmlee thanks for your replie as we'll as the rest of you sorry that you could not name your son that but i don't meet to many people with the name Jeremiah really i've only met one. First name: Jeremiah Middle:Edward richard Last:Johnson I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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