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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Judgment is coming soon all will face it But here is darkness why not embrace it The pain is one thing I will never know In the darkness I am doomed to go What does it matter if I cannot feel For in the darkness nothing is real On the weak and corrupted soul Excessive darkness takes the toll A fire’s last ember is hard to defend Life is fragile but is it easy to end Maybe it's better for me anyway I will long for darkness not the day Turning the trip of my insanity It makes its stops but ne’er for me If darkness doesn’t dig my grave My ending days where madmen rave Will I feel better not having a name? Would I feel better if nothingness came? While I still live they'll cut me apart And there the darkness running my heart Paranoia bores deep into my soul Darkness enters and fills in the whole But if the pain can be swept away I will long for darkness not the day My mind has broken through the mist I can’t even know if I still exist An apparition abruptly appears But I can't see through bittersweet tears Her wild caged stare makes me realize The mirror reflection caught in her eyes I knew her not but I can feel her love In her face, I see what I'm thinking of The woman drifts on but was she there Too much fantasy can be a nightmare I hear a voice say, "I always loved you" Do memories prove experience true? How do I know I'm not losing my mind? Is the answer possible to find? Confusion forces madness upon men Can I go back if I've never been? I've lost hold of my last waning candle And now is gone but for waxed covered handle It looks as if my darkness surrounds me But ‘lo this time the pain has found me There's a trail that leads into the night I knew long ago there'd be no bright light A twisted tree stands in paradise grown My eyes tell me what's not to be known Those barren branches seem productive Simple solutions so seductive A lonely testament to what goes wrong When a dying spirit stands too long I question the times I have forgotten And as the tree's fruit inside so rotten Then all is clear the answers revealed What I’ve held close my shattering shield Full of poison I know I must die So much easier to choose the lie There before me a silhouetted shade Through depths of darkness I see it wade Never I know has such beauty flowed With an air of grace down a damned filled road I find that I am forced to follow In the darkness the path is swallowed But then again I can see the shade And no longer will I be afraid So many places I am led through Familiar faces that I once knew Their mouths gape open and spill one word But in the darkness their voices unheard My heart turns cold I cannot move I demand intentions quickly proved The supernatural need not persuade Into the darkness I follow the shade For a score not another around Silence can be such an unsettling sound Bloody wars fought I never will fight So many wrongs never able to right Dirty child I can see it crying I must pass on as my soul is dying Vision of evil that man has made I would be all right if not for the shade Seasons change but it is always cold Time must pass I am growing this old Like a lost black sheep behind the shade I knew one day even it would fade In despair the end I grab for its hand My paws are useless but for digging in sand At once I'm human death its charms I welcome my friend with folded arms End [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i know this is long and it will need 3 times the votes but it really was the biggest help in therapy to a part of life i was having and i was somewhat saved by writing it so here it is for submission... |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*PHEW* what an epic poem! you never cease to amaze me Walt. Good job!  ~Heather |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
*Closes mouth* Wowee... That maybe a long one but I think it's definetly worthy of the book! Epicly wonderous in the exploration of your darkness.. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ahh, I gotta vote here for my favorite of all walt's poems  I liked it so much when I first read it, I stole the title and made my own poem based off it. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ What a wonderful testament to troubled times with a glimmer of hope that takes us forward. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Int bad yanno Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW! This was incredible Walt ... I feel like you took me on a journey to the dark side right along with you! Your imagery, emotions, flow ... all superb! My favoite of yours I think Walt, well done! (click) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Very impressive. I don't know how you managed to write such a long poem in rhyming couplets without seeming forced or somewhat trivial. Not only that, but the content never rambles. Excellent, even if long. In fact, even more impressive because of the length. Pete |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
WOW.... the length is part of it's spell. I love this poem and am going back to read it again and then once more. Hey that style looks awfully familiar...lol. Fab-a-mundo!!! I'm voting for this one. I really hope it gets into the book. Linda M. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
luvitluvitluvit...yuh know I luvit. chris p.s. did I tell you I loved this one? Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I thought I should reply using your style of writing but all I came up with was "Cool" You are certainly unique and untouched The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
You have powers I, as a poet, wish I had...the imagery, the rhyme, everything is perfect, and of course, the poem is lovely! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Walt this is amazing writing, and if its too long, maybe a condensed version could be put in-- its so damn good it should be there in some form to represent you thank you for sharing it take care, jm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ok Walt. VOTE! VOTE! VOTE! There, that should cover it |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ack, this one was in danger of being forgotten and not making it into the book!! I gotta bump this one back up, its book material if nothing else is |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It must be published, it must be published! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like the dark--bad for my typing tho...back to top you go! and take that vote with you! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Excellent writng Walt, Love it I do you have my vote! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
vote... well written Walt... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow! The feeling and honesty in this one blew me away. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
WOW walt! This is incredibly powerful...I love the exploration of the darkness within you in this one...it has my vote! *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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