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0 posted 2000-06-20 02:58 PM

Judgment is coming soon all will face it
But here is darkness why not embrace it
The pain is one thing I will never know
In the darkness I am doomed to go
What does it matter if I cannot feel
For in the darkness nothing is real
On the weak and corrupted soul
Excessive darkness takes the toll
A fire’s last ember is hard to defend
Life is fragile but is it easy to end
Maybe it's better for me anyway
I will long for darkness not the day

Turning the trip of my insanity
It makes its stops but ne’er for me
If darkness doesn’t dig my grave
My ending days where madmen rave
Will I feel better not having a name?
Would I feel better if nothingness came?
While I still live they'll cut me apart
And there the darkness running my heart
Paranoia bores deep into my soul
Darkness enters and fills in the whole
But if the pain can be swept away
I will long for darkness not the day

My mind has broken through the mist
I can’t even know if I still exist
An apparition abruptly appears
But I can't see through bittersweet tears
Her wild caged stare makes me realize
The mirror reflection caught in her eyes
I knew her not but I can feel her love
In her face, I see what I'm thinking of
The woman drifts on but was she there
Too much fantasy can be a nightmare
I hear a voice say, "I always loved you"
Do memories prove experience true?
How do I know I'm not losing my mind?
Is the answer possible to find?
Confusion forces madness upon men
Can I go back if I've never been?
I've lost hold of my last waning candle
And now is gone but for waxed covered handle
It looks as if my darkness surrounds me
But ‘lo this time the pain has found me
There's a trail that leads into the night
I knew long ago there'd be no bright light

A twisted tree stands in paradise grown
My eyes tell me what's not to be known
Those barren branches seem productive
Simple solutions so seductive
A lonely testament to what goes wrong
When a dying spirit stands too long
I question the times I have forgotten
And as the tree's fruit inside so rotten
Then all is clear the answers revealed
What I’ve held close my shattering shield
Full of poison I know I must die
So much easier to choose the lie

There before me a silhouetted shade
Through depths of darkness I see it wade
Never I know has such beauty flowed
With an air of grace down a damned filled road
I find that I am forced to follow
In the darkness the path is swallowed
But then again I can see the shade
And no longer will I be afraid
So many places I am led through
Familiar faces that I once knew
Their mouths gape open and spill one word
But in the darkness their voices unheard
My heart turns cold I cannot move
I demand intentions quickly proved
The supernatural need not persuade
Into the darkness I follow the shade

For a score not another around
Silence can be such an unsettling sound
Bloody wars fought I never will fight
So many wrongs never able to right
Dirty child I can see it crying
I must pass on as my soul is dying
Vision of evil that man has made
I would be all right if not for the shade

Seasons change but it is always cold
Time must pass I am growing this old
Like a lost black sheep behind the shade
I knew one day even it would fade
In despair the end I grab for its hand
My paws are useless but for digging in sand
At once I'm human death its charms
I welcome my friend with folded arms


[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-20-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-06-20 03:01 PM

i know this is long and it will need 3 times the votes but it really was the biggest help in therapy to a part of life i was having and i was somewhat saved by writing it so here it is for submission...
X Angel
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2 posted 2000-06-20 03:02 PM

what an epic poem!
you never cease to amaze me Walt.
Good job!


Dusk Treader
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3 posted 2000-06-20 06:22 PM

*Closes mouth* Wowee... That maybe a long one but I think it's definetly worthy of the book!  Epicly wonderous in the exploration of your darkness..

Abrahm Simons

"Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon

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4 posted 2000-06-20 06:55 PM

Ahh, I gotta vote here for my favorite of all walt's poems   I liked it so much when I first read it, I stole the title and made my own poem based off it.
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5 posted 2000-06-20 07:31 PM

What a wonderful testament to troubled times with a glimmer of hope that takes us forward.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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6 posted 2000-06-21 04:51 AM

Int bad yanno  


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2000-06-21 07:08 AM

WOW! This was incredible Walt ... I feel like you took me on a journey to the dark side right along with you!  Your imagery, emotions, flow ... all superb! My favoite of yours I think Walt, well done!  (click)  

Best wishes,

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8 posted 2000-06-21 10:14 AM

Very impressive. I don't know how you managed to write such a long poem in rhyming couplets without seeming forced or somewhat trivial. Not only that, but the content never rambles. Excellent, even if long. In fact, even more impressive because of the length.


linda munday
since 2000-06-17
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9 posted 2000-06-21 10:35 AM

WOW.... the length is part of it's spell.
I love this poem and am going back to read it again and then once more.  Hey that style looks awfully
Fab-a-mundo!!!  I'm voting for this one.
I really hope it gets into the book.
Linda M.

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10 posted 2000-06-22 07:15 AM

luvitluvitluvit...yuh know I luvit.


p.s.  did I tell you I loved this one?

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

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11 posted 2000-06-22 07:06 PM

I thought I should reply using your style of writing but all I came up with was "Cool"
You are certainly unique and untouched

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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12 posted 2000-06-22 09:27 PM

You have powers I, as a poet, wish I had...the imagery, the rhyme, everything is perfect, and of course, the poem is lovely!
Janet Marie
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13 posted 2000-06-23 10:12 PM

Walt this is amazing writing,
and if its too long, maybe a condensed version could be put in--
its so damn good it should be there in some form to represent you
thank you for sharing it
take care, jm

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14 posted 2000-06-23 10:20 PM

ok Walt. VOTE! VOTE! VOTE! There, that should cover it  
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15 posted 2000-06-27 11:37 AM

Ack, this one was in danger of being forgotten and not making it into the book!! I gotta bump this one back up, its book material if nothing else is  
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16 posted 2000-06-27 11:43 AM

It must be published, it must be published!  

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

serenity blaze
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17 posted 2000-07-07 06:15 AM

I like the dark--bad for my typing tho...back to top you go! and take that vote with you!
Dark Angel
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18 posted 2000-07-14 08:15 PM

Excellent writng Walt, Love it I do  
you have my vote!  

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19 posted 2000-07-15 06:26 PM

vote... well written Walt...
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20 posted 2000-08-01 01:47 AM

Wow! The feeling and honesty in this one blew me away.  

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

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21 posted 2000-08-09 12:00 PM

WOW walt!  This is incredibly powerful...I love the exploration of the darkness within you in this has my vote!

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

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