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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Walk Away I gaze into your lovely eyes, Enchanting lustrous pools of blue, You cast that smile and my heart sighs, My fondest dream - To look at you, Yet knowing though I'll beg you stay, You'll turn from me ... And walk away. To hear your voice, to see your smile, To hold your hand just for a while And run my fingers through your hair, To share that treasured time with you, These are the things I love to do; I reach for you ... But you're not there. I sleep, I dream and see your face, I wake, I sigh and speak your name; I call your name ... But you're not there. I miss your smile, your charm and grace, Without you near, life's not the same; I search for you ... But know not where. The mem'ries you have given me - That only you and I can see - The times we shared, the things we said, I'll cherish 'till my bitter end. You took my heart; I lost my head, And fell in love with my best friend. My heart still aches for you once more To be close like we were before, Oh painful loss - my tears outpour. So ease my hurt that I might sleep To dream sweet memories I keep And soothe my soul ... No more to weep. I gaze into your lovely eyes, I think you hear how my heart cries, Bewitched by magic pools of blue, I dare not take my eyes from you. And even as I beg you stay, You turn from me ... And walk away. Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Umm... Wow! Let me repeat, WOW! I love this, such longing and so wonderfully written. Great read  Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Beautiful work!  ~Heather |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Whaddayamean "Not A Poet"??????????? You most definately are a poet Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
good jo not a poet i like this lots |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Thanks everyone for your kind compliments. This poem started out as one stanza, sort of a mix of the first and last. I wanted to expand it and experiment with altering the rhyme scheme with each stanza. I wasn't sure how this might be accepted. Thanks again. Pete |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Absolutely beautiful!! I LOVE THIS!! Written with such longing and heartfelt feeling!! Makes me want to cry!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Mr. Poet, YES YOU ARE A POET because this is so very beautiful, wonderful, awesome, so much enjoyed. Cerenity |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
NotAPoet~ The 'mix' worked very well ... this is so pretty. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
Not A Poet, this is exactly my situation as I speak...you spelt it out so well, what a great poem, it captured the emotion precisely. Keep it up! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed your poem. Nicely written. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I sleep, I dream and see your face, I wake, I sigh and speak your name; I call your name ... But you're not there. I miss your smile, your charm and grace, Without you near, life's not the same; I search for you ... But know not where. --------------- said it before....say it again definately a poet  this is perfect...awesome jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Thanks all. Before this one slips away into that river of lost poetry, I wanted to thank you who have been so kind as to comment on my poem.  Pete |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Awesome this was Pete...awesome ! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is touching and beautifully done, Pete! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very excellent work, good sir. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
You took my heart; I lost my head, And fell in love with my best friend. Rich with emotion, yet presented simply and elegantly as is your habit, Pete. This swept me up in wistfulness and longing, to be sure -- but when I read the above lines, I found myself nodding and thinking: "Yes, I understand." This has my vote. --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Munda, Denise and Deer, Thanks for responding. Glad you approve. Kess, "Yes, I understand." My what a beautiful response. Thanks, Pete |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Thought you could hide in here did ya!! there's no escape ... well done Pete p |
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