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Jon Mewett
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0 posted 2000-06-20 04:23 AM

The storm was raging higher
The driving snow and sleet
I spied a child Angel walking down the street
Her wings were down and folded
Her face was wet with tears
Her shoulders seemed to carry the world and all it’s fears

Tragically I watched her
As she stumbled on her way
No halo shone above her on her face so dank and grey
She fell upon her knees
At the house of wealth and fame
She rapped upon the door but they thought
It was a game

She sat there on the veldt side
Her head bowed in great despair
Such a pitiful sight sitting crying there
Her tears were big and flooding
Her sobbing tortured cry
That sound I’ll carry with me until the day I die

Her little form was heaving
With tears shed from the heart
It was so sad and rending I felt my own tears start
Together we were crying
For the world so big gone wrong
But there was no one there to hear our freedom song

The fallen Angel tears
Began now to abate
I put my arm around her to quell her sodden state
She slipped her hand in mine
‘There’s no need to be alone’
Her tears no longer falling I took my Angel home

Jon Mewett

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1 posted 2000-06-20 04:37 AM

Oh, this is sweet --- and well written!


Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-06-20 06:52 AM

So tender and touching Jon, absolutely beautiful!

And CONGRATULATIONS on 500 posts!!!

Best wishes,

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-20-2000).]

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3 posted 2000-06-20 09:07 AM

Ahhh I like you!  
Anybody who would have left her in the rain is a meanie. Great poem Jon.

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4 posted 2000-06-20 09:17 AM

this is beautiful
excellent imagery
laced with tender emotions...
perfect choice

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5 posted 2000-06-20 09:33 AM

Jon~ (that is how my husband spells his name too!   ) this is game me goose bumps!   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

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6 posted 2000-06-20 09:38 AM

Jon - How well written and sweet this is.  Just beautiful.  Bonnie
Jon Mewett
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7 posted 2000-06-20 02:19 PM

Thanx everybody your kindness is kinda overwhelming.


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8 posted 2000-06-21 04:16 AM

Jon, your kindness shone like a lantern through that storm  


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

Jon Mewett
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9 posted 2000-06-22 09:08 AM

Thanx Eric very kind.


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10 posted 2000-06-25 12:00 PM

I am glad I had the pleasure to read this wonderful and tender piece!!  This is great!!  I love angels so hence I enjoyed this very much!!! Thank You!!

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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11 posted 2000-06-25 12:06 PM

Positively one of your best, Jon! I'd never tire of reading this! Beautiful and touching!


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12 posted 2000-07-08 04:22 PM

My goodness,I love this poem Jon, it flows so beautiful, and pulls on the heart.
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13 posted 2000-07-08 08:34 PM

jon, really good job on this one.  tugged at my heart with the awesome job of imagery.  hope this one makes it in.

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love

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14 posted 2000-07-08 10:35 PM

The softest touch of angels
is enough to give the heart a glow.
Thank you for sharing.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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15 posted 2000-08-07 07:00 PM

Such a sweet, beautiful piece.  Glad I found this little gem.  Bonnie
Jon Mewett
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16 posted 2000-08-08 03:34 AM

Thanx everybody


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17 posted 2000-08-08 08:17 PM

You are a amazing master storyteller. It's flow is equal only to the message. Beautiful.

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18 posted 2000-08-08 11:09 PM

oh, i do love this...what an outstanding little story!  


"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

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