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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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I pull words from somewhere and from that same somewhere deep within something pushes them seeking recognition threading words through the tiny opening that refuses closure stringing them out piling them into poems begging gasping for understanding I pull they push I collect words gather the strings I need gather I must for stop they don’t and go back inside they won’t and see I cannot the aching place from whence they come and lest it overfill and explode stand I with pockets stuffed picking poems and no where to put one more single word but the ache stills not pushes its words some sense to make it cries out for me to stop the insanity the words the ache [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
POWERFUL is the word I had used the last time I read this one and the flipped out to write some continuous chain of (hmmm) words.. This time, I will behave and just say, POWERFUL and heart-felt... regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"but the ache stills not.. INDEED...so we must write and write... excellent poem... builds in intensity with each line... perfect choice jm |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks you two, I am so pleased to have the opportunity to be considered for the book, but I have written so many heartfelt poems that its hard for me to say which are "best"....sigh |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
K, this one too, I do love the way you write, its fresh and powerfull. Parker |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was a great choice Corazon ... I loved it when I first read it in Open, and still do! Best wishes, /Kit |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Oh I know! the poetry bursts forth from me in untamed torrents! This was great. And I am left sheepishly wondering how I have missed your poetry before now.  ~Heather |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
It's even worse when the words keep coming and you've got all these ideas and the words keep coming and you can't get to a pen and paper and the words keep coming and your head goes POP!  Eric. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
I know lol, sometimes I write poems in my head while walking laps around my drive, and I have to stop and write them down or I keep rewriting and rewriting and get no peace from my walking  thanks all for the comments |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed the poem. Well written. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Am I the only one who gets the feeling of 'giving birth' to a poem when reading this? add my vote.  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~nice~~nice~~nice~~nice~~nice~~nice~~ that much niceness adds up to book material! Glad to add my support! dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all for the nice comments...and lol@giving birth...i hadn't thought of it, but yep you might be right |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
It's hard for me to pick my favorites of yours as I have so many, but this one I remember and it ranks right up there |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Every line a beautiful read. Bonnie |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you much, hoot(good to see you) and bonnie... [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-17-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
APPLAUSE!!! X Vote love this one... painfully and beautifully executed |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very well written... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I will echo everyone else..this is great.. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW a wonderfully powerful piece...enjoyed this alot Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Gloria May New Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 2 |
This was a very touching poem. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is truly great, wonderful work! My vote's in.......ethome |
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