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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-06-19 01:30 PM

I pull words from
and from that same somewhere
deep within
something pushes them
seeking recognition
threading words through
the tiny opening
that refuses closure
stringing them out
piling them into poems
for understanding
I pull
they push
I collect words
gather the strings
I need gather
I must
for stop they don’t
and go back
inside they won’t
and see I cannot
the aching place
from whence they come
and lest it overfill
and explode
stand I with pockets stuffed
picking poems
and no where to put
one more single word
but the ache stills not
pushes its words
some sense to make
it cries out
for me to stop
the insanity
the words
the ache

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-19-2000).]

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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-06-19 01:59 PM

POWERFUL is the word I had used the last time I read this one and the flipped out to write some continuous chain of (hmmm) words..
This time, I will behave and just say, POWERFUL and heart-felt...

regards, sudhir

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-06-19 02:12 PM

"but the ache stills not.. we must write and write...
excellent poem...
builds in intensity with each line...
perfect choice

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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

3 posted 2000-06-19 02:15 PM

thanks you two, I am so pleased to have the opportunity to be considered for the book, but I have written so many heartfelt poems that its hard for me to say which are "best"....sigh
Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
4 posted 2000-06-19 05:52 PM

K, this one too, I do love the way you write, its fresh and powerfull.


Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-06-19 06:16 PM

This was a great choice Corazon ... I loved it when I first read it in Open, and still do!

Best wishes,

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
6 posted 2000-06-19 07:57 PM

Oh I know! the poetry bursts forth from me in untamed torrents! This was great. And I am left sheepishly wondering how I have missed your poetry before now.


Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England
7 posted 2000-06-20 03:15 PM

It's even worse when the words keep coming and you've got all these ideas and the words keep coming and you can't get to a pen and paper and the words keep coming and your head goes POP!  


Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

8 posted 2000-06-20 06:25 PM

I know lol, sometimes I write poems in my head while walking laps around my drive, and I have to stop and write them down or I keep rewriting and rewriting and get no peace from my walking  
thanks all for the comments

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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

9 posted 2000-06-26 02:14 PM

Enjoyed the poem. Well written.
Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
10 posted 2000-06-26 02:45 PM

Am I the only one who gets the feeling of 'giving birth' to a poem when reading this?

add my vote.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
11 posted 2000-07-05 01:13 PM

that much niceness adds up to book material!
Glad to add my support!

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

12 posted 2000-07-05 05:16 PM

thanks all for the nice comments...and lol@giving birth...i hadn't thought of it, but yep you might be right  
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
13 posted 2000-07-06 09:07 AM

It's hard for me to pick my favorites of yours as I have so many, but this one I remember and it ranks right up there  
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
14 posted 2000-07-16 08:55 AM

Every line a beautiful read.  Bonnie
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

15 posted 2000-07-17 10:12 AM

thank you much, hoot(good to see you) and bonnie...  

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-17-2000).]

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
16 posted 2000-07-17 02:31 PM


X Vote

love this one... painfully and beautifully executed

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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
17 posted 2000-07-18 12:06 PM

very well written...

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Poet deVine
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
18 posted 2000-07-18 01:23 AM

I will echo everyone else..this is great..  
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
19 posted 2000-07-18 09:59 AM

WOW a wonderfully powerful piece...enjoyed this alot

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Gloria May
New Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 2

20 posted 2000-07-18 06:31 PM

This was a very touching poem.
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
21 posted 2000-07-18 06:59 PM

This is truly great, wonderful work! My vote's in.......ethome
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