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Bridget |
Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Bridget She sits cross legged, Silent as a statue. A soft stone face, Calmer than a millpond. Wind buffets her body, And races through the grass. Her hair twists and tangles. She does not notice. She’s cried all her tears, But the pain is not gone, Unlike the people, Whom she thought were her friends. They used her like a puppet, Toying with her heart strings, Then stamping out her smile. She said she didn’t care, That she didn’t really need them. Although her heart was weeping, From broken promises, And trust betrayed. And as they laughed at her and taunted, She knew that it would pass... She was Bridget, And always would be. Lynne Chudley [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This does quite well describe me all too often!! I so often feel this way!! I know this isn't about me, but this is a very good poem!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
YuLan~ A pensive read ... enjoyed it very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
YL, I loved the opening stanzas. I thought the part near the end kinda crashed a little too suddenly with the beauty of the beginning, but maybe that's just me. A worthy addition to the book, either way. Mike |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thank you Bridgette, Marge and Mike.. This was a repost from the Corner Pub, so i could submit it for the book. ^_^ Bridgette.. ^^ yeah, this poem isn't actually about someone I know.. I am glad u like it! ^_^ (Love your name.. *_^) Marge.. thanx, well I am glad u liked it, too.. ^_^ Mike.. hehe, the name Bridget means strength.. strong.. so the last stanza says she is strong.. yeah it kinda is abrupt, but that is the intended effect, as what happened to her WAS abrupt.. she had no warning, and it felt unfinished to her.. so, perhaps warrants a 'not so beautiful' ending, in a slightly different style from the beginning, as her friendships ended in such a way. ^_^ thanx 4 your observation, u r so right. ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey Yu, stirs at a deep level. such is life..., eh? much sorrow and intensity left after one has run out of tears... and yet in the end, one cuts it off and gets on with it... good read, D aka... bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
thought provoking.. i liked it helped me see something... Linda M. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
this was really good! Keep it up! ~Heather |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you both, Linda and Heather, for you kind comments.. ^_^ much apreciated.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ahhh that inner strength....Loved this. Bonnie |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
will echo BSC on this one, it portrays the inner strength so beautifully |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Not Jessica, is it Lynne? hehe, You wrote this ages ago.. I think you posted on another forum as well.. quite competitive.. hehe.. should I vote.. should I.... zzzz.... - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx BSC and Corazon.. yeah, that's what I wanted to show in this writing.. ^^ Nooo James, not Jessica.. *_^ (Jessica means "God beholds" ^_^) but yes.. u r right.. Bridget.. Jessica.. just names, mm? *_^ Thank u.. (yes, yes! u should vote!! hehe.. ) Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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