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minstrel Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 21Bowling Green, KY |
~The Carving~ Walking through my old neighborhood’s streets I reminisce about my life’s past. The musky Smell of the hickory trees offer my memory treats Of a childhood long forgotten; when in the autumn —my voice was husky. My feet shuffle their way through a neighbor’s lawn Full of fallen leaves. There, suddenly my eyes behold, Through the moist fall air something as eternal as the —reoccurring dawn. A simple symbol of a time when the truth of my —heart was told. The weathered wood of an old hickory tree Stands before me as it once did all those Years ago. Within this wood is a piece of me, A piece as delicate as the petals of an uncut rose. I raise my trembling hand with fingers outstretched Towards this insignia of my past. I trace each line With stinging pain and teary joy, both fetched By a single memory, of a time when she was mine. As I run my chilled fingers over her name I notice a slight Taste of cinnamon. A faint hint of rose is also in the air Of this autumn day. Her lips tasted of cinnamon on one —particular night, And I believe she often wore rose in her hair. That night I etched these symbols into this particular Hickory tree. We both were young with young love —and young pride. How I wish now that on that night the future would —have been made clear So that I could have seen all this pain that I now feel inside. It is now clear that nothing is as we wish it to be. Not all love lasts forever as we hope it will. How I thought That our love would have lasted longer than this old tree Marked with a simple carving claiming all that I had sought. [This message has been edited by minstrel (edited 07-28-2000).] |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Very nice writing. I was touched. Hugs, Heather Without the experiance of love where would we be?We would have no wonderful memories to cherish.With love it brings hurt with hurt brings bittersweet |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very well written touched me too If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Yes, it is touching, it's so nice to have a place to our own.. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Nice writings ~~ reminds me of my first love that I too thought would last a life time but didn't. Lovely indeed Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Minstrel~ This is the first of your works I have read. I'd like to welcome you to the family. The memories etched in this piece certainly cascade for me. What a joy to know that others recall the bark of their tree of youthful hopes. Wonderfully well-done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Vaporous One Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 35 |
Beautifully done; the imagery was breathtaking...I was so there. Nice job.  |
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minstrel Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 21Bowling Green, KY |
Thank you all for the kind words. I'm new to Passions but I've felt very welcome by you all. I hope to share more with you and read more of your works as well. minstrel |
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