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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-07-28 10:07 PM


Thoughts that are a dreamer's net.
Cast into the days sunset.
Held fast by kismet.

Of heart and brawn she was born.
And baptized around the horn.
She was lusty spawn.

Stood the oceans rage as few.
And only she and I knew
The many of her coup.

Named and called the Honey Bee.
Mistress of the mortal me
Lost, downed, lost at sea.

My mind rides before her mast
Ever splicing waters past
Till my bones are cast.

Her heart was given to the sea
Her brawn shriven the mind to free.

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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2000-07-28 11:02 PM

I cannot put my finger on exactly what it is about this piece, but such a picture before me, as only you can paint. I think this one deserves to be cherished...and when I find the reason, I'll share it with you...


~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

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2 posted 2000-07-29 02:14 AM

WOW...great piece of writing  

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

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Backwaters of Avalon
3 posted 2000-07-29 05:15 AM

I do not know what the poem is actually about, but it's surely a good piece, great work.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.

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4 posted 2000-07-29 05:40 AM

great work...
well written

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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Florida's Foreverly Shores
5 posted 2000-07-29 09:48 AM

The ship's upon the ocean floor
but the aquatic ghosts bubble
to the surface of memory.

Wonderful, my friend.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Vaporous One
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6 posted 2000-07-29 11:24 AM

I liked the first and fifth stanzas very much; wonderful imagery.  The second stanza seemed a little weak, though. And the rhyme that you kept up so well throughout kinda faltered here.  But overall, a very nice piece.  
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-07-29 02:15 PM

To all of the above, my sincere thanks for the read and vote.
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