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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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I looked back Dry rot ate the steps of wood All the places I had stood. Brambles pad the path and yard Abandon hangs sad facade. Uncaring stared the moon on high Uncertain seemed the wind to sigh And silent trees laid ghostly shade Like painted Halloween brocade. Haphazard hung the cobweb frills From hollow windows empty sills And only sorrow gorged the glean Mocking me in every scene. Dissolved away in simple truth Past relics of my naive youth And queasy load my ducts with tears And heavy grew the weight of years. The past is gone, a sad amen The bitter sweet will not again. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Caught it and read it and voted already..it is very very good! |
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Geoffrey Sonnen Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142Reading, PA USA |
I'm not kidding, this is absolutely awesome. I wish I could vote a hundred times ! I hope you don't mind that I share this with others. The way you phrased this shows a very unique talent and for me, this is a "Keeper". Awe-struck, Geoff |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Beautiful...you have my vote. Linda |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Seymour, this was brilliant, voted voted voted. Why not just cut the grass, new memories need to be made.  Parker |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Very good....... LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Seymour this is so melancholy....and beautifully written. Bonnie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Thanks for the read and vote. Geoffrey, Thanks for the awesome. L Tiuch, Thanks for the beautiful and vote. Haleyja, Thanks for the brilliant. Heather, Thanks for the vote. BSC, Thanks Bonnie |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very well written witha nice flow... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Avanti, Thank you for the nice comment and vote. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Sy, This is great! This definitely belongs in the book. Outstanding in every way. fh |
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Flower Power Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 29Ottawa, Ontario, Canada |
I liked it a lot. It's almost like a melody. It'd be so easy to add music to it. Love, Stephanie [This message has been edited by Flower Power (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching, Seymour, I can relate well to this one. Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Fred, Your comments mean allot, thanks Flower, Thanks for the flower. Denise, And I can relate to you. *L* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh, This is a wonderful poem, well written in perfect meter.I can only vote once, but I've got 2 thumbs up Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah yes, thought I was experience deja vu...{~,^} click Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
WOW!!...i mean, wow... and i'm not even sure what else to say...! this is absolutely wonderful..i'm in awe at how youve capture this moment..such are childhood places when you go back and shatter the remembrance with reality.. "everything changes but the change.." -corey hart dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thanks for the vote and two thumbs up. Sy Sunshine, Deja vu is a great compliment. *L* Dgvarner, Thanks for the WOW and wonderful comment. |
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