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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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i trembled as i heard your voice quiet in the reciever... with my wall yet partially built i feared that you would break it down-- that i would not be able to crouch low enough behind my unfinished safety in a crude attempt to guard my damaged heart... i pleaded with not a word, my soul screamed out in whispered silence; have mercy! i hoped that you would hear... and then, familiar words descended from your lips and all around fell silent. the world stopped moving for half a second. before i knew, i'd responded with the same-- how can i deny my heart, how can i hide behind my wall... you didnt try to break through, you merely stood at the foot and whispered. my structure nearly disappeared... three words, my friend, three words-- i trembled when i heard... --dgvarner "i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh this is great just simply great! I love the way it comes together, I love the end, very well done!! |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
dgvarner Outstanding, I loved the last part... three words...and standing at the base of the structure. I think many people can relate to this one. Great poem, Linda M. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
powerful presentation. really gets you at the end. great job with this poem. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
thanks all for such heart-felt responses  i really appreciate it!  dg "i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You amaze me. Really. Beautiful and heartfelt Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, Just beautiful!! Love it! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
So well written... I have been through the same situation... could understand...sompletely... lovely If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Well written LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DGVarner~ I really enjoyed this read. Three perfect words stand at the foundation of a strong structure ... you've built it well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
prometheus: amaze you? really?? cool thanks for your reply!dark angel: thanks! glad you liked it avanti AND heather: thanks so much for reading and responding! marge: so glad you enjoyed it! thanks for your reply!dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very well done. It pulled me in and held me there til the end. Excellent writing Liz |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
elizabeth: so glad i could pull you in thanks for your reply!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee you did it again, if I was in an audience, we'd be giving you a standing ovation. What signifies a piece of writing that is so far above me that I can only stand and stare. See me agape then! Beautiful as always.  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
marsha: i'm the lucky one for having you as my "audiance"!...a whole audience of marshas....yep, that'll work for me thanks for the standing ovation!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ahhh, this is wonderful dg, those three little words, the tremble....just great. Bonnie |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Wow this is a great poem - well written and touching. Well done. Moonshine. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- hey, how did i miss this one? you know i love this. you've got my vote.  -tricks "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
bonnie..yeah..those three little words can do so much! moonshine: happy to touch you tricks: easy to miss...so many great ones in here..so little time to read them!! thanks all for your replies dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
bumping...sorry..got good responses..thought it might be worth the bump...forgive?...  "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
dg, wow, my heart could really relate to this. I could feel the tension, as I remembered moments like this of my own. Thanks for sharing, Juls |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey juls! i so appreciate your reply! thanks for reading dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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