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Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

0 posted 2000-07-17 12:07 PM

She didn’t cry when you died
she waded far out into the salty sea
filling her belly with the bitter taste
of each unpredictable wave,
as it came crashing down upon her.
The hot flames of the unforgiving sun,
singed her hair,
burning holes in her eyes
as she drifted aimlessly with the tide,
headed in no particular direction.
when the days turned into years,
there was nothing left of her but fragile bones,
floating on the surface of the rough water
and her heart,
laying in the cold dark abyss below.

© Copyright 2000 Deborah L. Carter - All Rights Reserved
Geoffrey Sonnen
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142
Reading, PA USA
1 posted 2000-07-17 12:55 PM

"My Heart Will Go On". Very sad and a well  written allegory. My Heart goes out to you if this is a reality to you.

Peace and Love to you, Geoffrey

Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida
2 posted 2000-07-17 06:11 PM

Thanks Geoffrey! No, this is not about me, but written about a someone that I dearly love.

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-07-17 07:41 PM

Debbie - what a quality this has - of sadness, and loss. Well written.


since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
4 posted 2000-07-17 10:14 PM

Deb.. oh oh.. lying in the abyss below.. yes. it's very touching... a pleasure to read...

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
5 posted 2000-07-17 11:57 PM

This was so painful...
to simply get eaten by the sea like that...and not even breathe a word...
sad...but well written

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
6 posted 2000-07-18 09:50 AM

Vivid imagery. I loved it much.


since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
7 posted 2000-07-18 09:54 AM

wow what a poem.  really good images here.  makes me sad to see someone feeling so blue.

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love

Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
8 posted 2000-08-03 12:09 PM

Oh, what a tragically beautiful piece.  Loved it.  Bonnie
Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
9 posted 2000-08-03 02:36 PM

the sadness was heartfelt...


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