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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
While Walking in the Woods Alone There was a lovely flower that I met While walking in the woods alone one day; Such beauty had I never seen and yet At first I could not find the words to say, Or understand, my feelings or my smile, But could not walk on by … I had to wait, To look, and smell, and touch for just a while, Although I knew my hour was growing late. Its golden petals, curled and soft as down, Were dancing in the breeze as fairies will, And closer look revealed they somehow bound The vision of a face, more lovely still, With eyes of azure blue but hint of gray, Created as my only sight to see - By then I could not bear to look away, That lovely flower had enchanted me. I sat, caressed, admired and dreamed of it, And wondered might there ever be some way For me to know and love this wond'rous bit, This lovely flower that I found that day, To cherish it and press it in a book, Or sit with it and talk of what we know, Or smell its fragrance, hold it close and look - But much too soon would come its time to go. Then much to my surprise and pleasure too, With gorgeous smile, my flower spoke to me And said, "You are my dearest friend, it's true." - My dearest wish was what this had to be. While my enchanted eyes and ears, of course, Were dreaming such a charming phrase I heard, I searched with hopes to find that voice's source, That lovely voice which spoke such lovely word. But in that verdant wood there was no other, No face, no body, soul, nor spirit found, For everywhere I searched, I found none other Who might have uttered such a lovely sound. With that I must believe that it was she, That lovely golden flower in the wood, Whose gorgeous smile I saw - who spoke to me Those lovely words which made me feel so good. Although I knew 'twas just a fool's illusion To think or hope that she might care for me, Her words and ways compounded my confusion, And made me wonder what this charm could be; Was she a flower, witch, or dream, this goddess, Who caught my eye and stole my heart that day? I search for answers still, but still it's hopeless - That lovely flower since has gone away, And nothing ever shall my grief allay. Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes, definatly a poet and the imagery in this is excellent wonderful writing perfect choice jm |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Not a Poet you're doing yourself a great diservice by that name... Putting a story in poetic terms likes me much, as does this. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
ahhh this was nice!  ~Heather |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very wonderful read here!! Nice poetry!! Hope to read more!!  Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thought this was awesome the first time I read it, still think it is !  |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Thanks all for reading and commenting. This has always been one of my favorite poems (of those written by me that is). It never got much attention in the CA but I like it anyway. So I thought I would just repost here and hope it is good enough to be selected for the book. I wonder if there is any significance to the fact that all but one of the responses have been from the ladies. Is this one to mushy or something for the guys? Or was it just written for a lady in the first place? If anyone has any ideas, I would appreciate enlightenment Pete [This message has been edited by Not A Poet (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
very nice job. like this a lot. it is very interesting read and great use of imagery. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I agree, wonderful imagery. You picked a great one. Whoever it was meant for, I bet a lot of different people would enjoy it! Joy |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
pete! this is great! big smiles luv Elyse |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Woods, fairy tale type poems.... they both appeal to me muchly Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
epoet, Joy, Elyse and Eric, Thank you so much for your kind compliments. I'm really glad you enjoyed. Pete |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love this poem and add my check mark Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Enchanting, magical, romantic....a vote from me. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely breathtaking, Pete! I love it! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, I'm late because my time has been very limited lately but this poem is not only expertly crafted but it shows great imagination. To take a theme like this and write a piece so long and so well-presented is not an easy task and yet you have made it look so. My vore's in.... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
NotAPoet~ It's enchanting ... obviously capturing the hearts of women who enjoy romanticism and the man who can portray it so tenderly. I'm captured ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Pete, I loved this poem when I first read it in CA, and reading it again, I found it to be even better. It's a shoe-in (sp?). Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
I reluctantly bring this one back up, but I have been away for the weekend and I really wanted to thank you guys for your kind responses. Thanks all, Pete |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Well done, you got my vote. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This speaks to the heart! Wonderfully crafted, and I think you've made a great choice for the book |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Not A Poet, Wonderful poetry here, so much enjoyed, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Sy, Thanks so much for your vote. Dove, I'm glad you enjoyed and approve my submission. Cerenity, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the compliment. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
As you know, I am in awe of your poetry. This one has all of the best elements, plus your wonderful imagination. With best regards Liz PS I am so in awe I forgot to vote! [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Sorry....but shooting this one back to the top...liked too much for it to get lost!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Bridgette, thanks much for bringing it back And Liz, surely you exagerate, but thanks for the wonderful compliment  Pete |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
YAY ..i missed it first time ...got it now tho....lol p |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Wonderfully written. I really enjoyed the "experience" you so beautifully portrayed. |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Wonderful and beautiful..... LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Philip, Linda and Heather, Thanks so much for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks all, Pete |
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