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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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~here’s to missing you breathing and shiny floors~ -one- I miss you, yes, my heart, the most, I think and you are still very much inside my head but my body has long since made absent the ache and refuses to be reminded of the gentleness of your touch your kisses so soft. how I miss the brown of your deep eyes and how I could see into more than just today in your your laugh and your smile... but your hands your hands my love will never be gone from me I can close my eyes and feel them still your hands loved me, even before you said so with your eyes -two- inside the red inside my head they overflow the tears and pour down my shirt filling the red until open the window I must or I will drown fresh air bathes relief maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe -three- you are gone and I am left to make some sense of it all by myself and so I put on knee pads and rubber gloves and meticulously (irrationally) wax the floors as if it will bring you back -four- and if I sleep instead of pacing with the stars as my company will I miss you any less? you are my quiet the still place in my soul, pace for pace step by step you softly numb my thoughts until the tired makes my feet stop and so I ask if I sleep instead will you be any less gone? |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
This gets my vote!  ~~~...if I sleep instead will you be any less gone?...~~~ Very good Question...Of course, you and I know that the answer to that is a resounding"NO!" NOT ANY LESS GONE! You must be inside my head,Corazon! This is wonderful...for many reasons... Thanks and keep writing! MagnoliaBlue Caribbean Island Property(PARADISE) FOR SALE.Investors wanted to start World Class Resort and Marina.No Risk or Blue Sky. joonz@mindspring.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
damn... i felt this one girl ... in my heart, head and knees  (you mean everone doesn't clean obsessively when upset???)  excellent C, take care, jm you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
one, two, three, four i know this for sure, the poem is wonderful true, and I want some more.... Corazon, regards from me, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Beautiful Corazon ! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I don't know how you keep doing what you do but don't stop. I love them all.... |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Oh god! I call it *scrubbing!!* Great read! ~Heather |
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Di Junior Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 19Ontario, Canada |
I loved this! It made me smile to see I'm not the only one who cleans when the void of "gone" comes around. You said it all so well. Di |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
You have captured an emotion here that haunts the soul when we're left by someone we love. Maybe poetry is a good way to reveal ourselves, when the floors don't need waxing! I enjoyed this! It's uniqueness makes it a good candidate for the book i feel. Hope to see it there. I have come to enjoy your writing style. Somehow seems to stand apart, in a good way! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
oh gosh, i didn't realize i hadn't said thank you on this poem.....thank you much, these "missing you" poems are hard to remember, but the kind comments help and yep poetry does too thank you all |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...this does suit me...so glad I went foraging today...have really found some treasures.. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Which of yours do I choose as a favoutite?...All of them?.. HUSG |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Very haunting. Made me think a lot. Thanks, Pete |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol rg...you make me smile...good to see you up and around....your smiles are contagious thanks notapoet |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Excellent writing. As always. Vote! |
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