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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-06-28 10:50 AM

~here’s to missing you breathing and shiny floors~

I miss you, yes,
my heart, the most, I think
and you are still very much
inside my head
but my body has long since
made absent the ache and
refuses to be reminded
of the gentleness of your touch
your kisses so soft.
how I miss the brown of your deep eyes
and how I could see into more
than just today in your
your laugh and your smile...
but your hands
your hands my love
will never be gone from me
I can close my eyes
and feel them still
your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes

inside the red inside my head
they overflow
the tears
and pour
down my shirt
filling the red
until open the window I must
or I will drown
fresh air bathes relief
maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to

you are gone
and I am left to make some sense of it
by myself
and so I put on knee pads
and rubber gloves and
wax the floors
as if it will bring you back

and if I sleep instead
of pacing with
the stars
as my company
will I miss you any less?
you are my quiet
the still place in my soul,
pace for pace
step by step
you softly numb my thoughts
until the tired makes
my feet stop
and so I ask
if I sleep
will you be any less gone?

© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

1 posted 2000-06-28 11:11 AM

This gets my vote!

~~~...if I sleep instead
will you be any less gone?...~~~

Very good Question...Of course,
you and I know that the answer
to that is a resounding"NO!"

You must be inside my

This is wonderful...for many
Thanks and keep writing!


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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-06-28 01:36 PM

i felt this one girl ...
in my heart, head and knees  
(you mean everone doesn't clean obsessively
when upset???)
excellent C,
take care, jm

you can say baby
baby can I hold you tonite
maybe if I said the right words
at the right time
you'd be mine
baby can I hold you tonite

Tracy C

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
3 posted 2000-06-28 01:49 PM

one, two, three, four
i know this for sure,
the poem is wonderful true,
and I want some more....

Corazon, regards from me,

Death, be not proud, though some have called thee,
Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so;

- John Donne

Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
4 posted 2000-06-28 03:14 PM

Beautiful Corazon !
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
5 posted 2000-06-28 03:25 PM

I don't know how you keep doing what you do but don't stop. I love them all....
X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
6 posted 2000-06-30 01:40 PM

Oh god! I call it *scrubbing!!*

Great read!

Junior Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 19
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2000-06-30 03:19 PM

I loved this!
It made me smile to see
I'm not the only one who cleans
when the void of "gone" comes
around. You said it all so well.

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
8 posted 2000-07-05 01:30 PM

You have captured an emotion here that haunts the soul when we're left by someone we love.  Maybe poetry is a good way to reveal ourselves, when the floors don't need waxing!
I enjoyed this!  It's uniqueness makes it a good candidate for the book i feel.  Hope to see it there.
I have come to enjoy your writing style.  Somehow seems to stand apart, in a good way!

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

9 posted 2000-07-05 05:10 PM

oh gosh, i didn't realize i hadn't said thank you on this poem.....thank you much, these "missing you" poems are hard to remember, but the kind comments help   and yep poetry does too  
thank you all  

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

10 posted 2000-07-09 09:43 AM

Wow...this does suit glad I went foraging today...have really found some treasures..
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
11 posted 2000-07-17 12:20 PM

Which of yours do I choose as a favoutite?...All of them?..


Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
12 posted 2000-07-17 12:36 PM

Very haunting. Made me think a lot.


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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

13 posted 2000-07-17 02:28 PM

lol make me smile...good to see you up and around....your smiles are contagious  

thanks notapoet  

doreen peri
Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
14 posted 2000-08-04 08:23 AM

Excellent writing. As always. Vote!
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