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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) You became my undeserved gift Showing me your magical touch Providing an angelic lift Something I had needed so much My heart like barren desert floors Lying scorched under the orb of fear You promised thunderous downpours My soul quaking as the storms near Fear I’ll break with your touch so strong That I’ll be lost within the storm You soothe me with hypnotic song Within your eyes the storm clouds form Dance of silver droplets begin Steam rises as you touch me Cool drops cover me like satin My senses acute and running free Scents of fire and rain fill the air Lightening cuts the sky like a knife Quenching thirst of need with sweet care Showering my soul with love and life As you move the heavens and earth Passion calls with thunder and light I’m in awe of my own rebirth As the storm rages on with might The torrent fills and soaks me through With thunderous cries you delight A net of light holds our love true The heavens glow as we unite Rain falls with hypnotic pleasures Calling barren earth to join you Uncovering hidden treasures Around us desert flowers grew You promised peace with the ending rain I begged you not to let me go You said goodbye, we’d meet again As you wrapped me with a rainbow |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The tempest doth rage , and so do emotions... Imagery is great. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Great poem.....the words flow together nicely......it was agreat read i enjoyed it much....  Julie :) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Fear I’ll break with your touch so strong That I’ll be lost within the storm You soothe me with hypnotic song Within your eyes the storm clouds form Dance of silver droplets begin Steam rises as you touch me Cool drops cover me like satin My senses acute and running free Scents of fire and rain fill the air Lightening cuts the sky like a knife Quenching thirst of need with sweet care Showering my soul with love and life ---------------- You promised peace with the ending rain I begged you not to let me go You said goodbye, we’d meet again As you wrapped me with a rainbow ----------------- WOW WOW WOW... my goodness...when you do a rain dance ... you dont mess around !! girl I LOVE THIS ... i can see how much work you put into this beauty... the imagery and metaphors are PERFECT!!! and the emotions ....well YOU KNOW excellent my sweet SS.., the beauty and grace of that last verse ... well, again .. YOU KNOW.. love ya girl jm |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jamie* thank you very much, I appreciate you reading~ Julie* thank you for your kind comment and for reading~ Jan* I'm glad you enjoyed it...this one was work...lol that darn meter anyway!!! Thank you for your always present support my dear friend! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful piece, my friend. I hope it gets in the book! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"...wrapped me with a rainbow." LOVE that! Boo-tiful H!  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
WOW! I fear my words would not do justice to such a fine work as this. The title is perfect, and the words!....I felt every one. Just awesome my dear friend. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Allow me to echo the nice comments made by Janet Marie. This one definitely has my vote. ~~nice writing~~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
LoveBug* Thank you so much~ Christopher* Thanks S.C.'s Eagle* Thank you my dear friend I'm glad you liked it~ Danny* Thank you very much...she said a mouthful...enough for two people in fact |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Miss Butterflie, This was a very wonderful storm, very much enjoyed. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Breathtaking imagery, and a lovely poem... Rain falls with hypnotic pleasures Calling barren earth to join you Uncovering hidden treasures Around us desert flowers grew You promised peace with the ending rain I begged you not to let me go You said goodbye, we’d meet again As you wrapped me with a rainbow ....... butterfly... what more did I ever want... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhh ... the imagery in this lovely poem, drenched me with pure delight! Wonderful Butterflies! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderful poem. I enjoyed very much. |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Breathtaking, with lovely imagery. Just Beautiful. Bonnie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh BDC, love the imagery here, a beautiful poem indeed |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Wonderful imagery, liked it very much. Thanks, Pete |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Beautiful writing here my friend. Happy to vote for such images!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Butterflies..... Held my breath as I read, loved the ending. Parker |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Butterflies that is a real pretty poem. I don't know who that storm was but it sounds like the desert soaked up a lot of needed attention. Really good writing, enjoyed the read. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Thank you to each one of you....your comments will always mean more to me than votes ever could...this you can be very sure of! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very sweet and tender these feelings are!!! Wow!! Very nice!!  Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
this is so well written and emotionally expressive truly a gift to read this needs to be in the book peace and poetry my sister is the poet I am but a shadow by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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