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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Deep, Deep Within Deep within the soul the silent longing is there, painfully, woefully stubborn, making it hard to breathe or take a deep breath. A sensation of reaching, there, down deep, holding on to the mind's most fleeting thought, discarding even love, for a brief answer to agony. How best to resolve this indisputable emotion, that centers itself into a pit of desire, not for love, but for a brief sharing of bidding well. I know the answer, for it has always been within me, but there are times where I fail to impart a sense of urgency, and the failure pains me. It is somewhat like a lonesome strain of one violin, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, beautiful in loneliness. For to share so much so that another is touched by the beauty of some words, this lingering feeling still doesn't let me breathe. ©KRJ 9 October 1999 Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It is somewhat like a lonesome strain of one violin, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, beautiful in loneliness Deep emotional thoughts with a beautiful presentation. Karilea, This must be your fourth poem that I am reading today and I am really enjoying it all the way.... Regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I cannot ask for a better audience, Sudhir...thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A lovely poem, Sunshine!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely, Karilea! Very well written. I could 'feel' this one!  Denise |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply beautiful Sunshine, from beginning to end. Bonnie |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I really enjoyed this Sunshine Well done Rex |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
by the beauty of some words, this lingering feeling still doesn't let me breathe. Can I add something more, I don't thing so The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This touched me deep, deep within ...wonderful poem sunshine Love Tracie Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you everyone, for all of your comments...I am so glad that you can feel this one, like I do... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It is somewhat like a lonesome strain of one violin, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, beautiful in loneliness. For to share so much so that another is touched by the beauty of some words, this lingering feeling still doesn't let me breathe. --------------- excellent Sun this is superb such a depth of emotion wonderful writing jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Janet Marie, that was indeed the emotion I was striving for...depth... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Yup! Yup! I liked this'un girl! ~Heather |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Heather! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible depth in this Sunshine ... the emotions just flow through so powerfully. Beautiful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kit, thank you for the considerate remarks! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine--A lovely spirit filled poem...that speaks to a place in me that understands. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, that was exactly what I was going for. I'm so very glad that you could hear it! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Awww Sunshine you did it again. Touched my heart in a very real way. I can't even express what reading this brought out in me. Truely beautiful writing. Juls |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Juliet, thank you so much for giving such a complimentary response. There are many fine poets here in Passions, and as you, I strive daily to reach a potential that others will cherish. I do hope you enjoy your time here... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Very nice LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Heather! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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