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D'e J`a Vu ( have I read this before ) |
Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
D'e J`a Vu ~~~ Again the ancient door creaks and groans pushing back the dust of ages stirred constantly through time immortal ~ Past swirling fog a distant light erupts with deafening twisting truths ~ Solid ground shatters beneath my feet then I hover ... helplessly above a hideous boiling maelstrom ~ The voice of truth explodes from above my every sin a shock-wave that drives me down ~ I lift my legs to avoid the searing pain but nauseously blistered hands take hold and drag me within the churning inferno ~ With blinding spin and uncontrollable suction the swirling current takes me and my scream is but a gurgle ~ Unconsciousness welcome but never met the searing pain still rising yet each fibre ripped apart to molecular particle ~ Riding the vortex of purification ~ Separating sins from soul ~ Till finally ~ I'm cast out the tail and caught by the uterine web with the voice of truth still taunting ~ " Better Luck This Time " [This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I love your surprise endings! Great writing, Rex! Denise |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Rex~ I am lacking any response better than "COOL" right now and well this is great! -SEA *vote* Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Oh this was great! And silly peeps are missing out on it! I loved the twist Rex! *high five* ~Heather |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Denise ... thanks ... I think I do better with them too Sea ... thanks for the 'cool' reply Heather ... 'high five' thankyou It's one of my favorites |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I can't lie, I had to read it twice to get it. I love it now that I understand it though..lol. Almost everyday I come upon a situation where someone (myself included) says "Better luck next time." I don't see why rebirth would be any different.... Oh, I think I just voted for you. Guess you do have luck this time ^_~ "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
AniKay ... thankyou ... we do hear that cliche quit often don't we |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
..and it should well be one of your favorites.. It's quite excellent |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
If only we could remember the mistake made the first time around.. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Thankyou Nan ... a complement from you means a lot to me Jamie ... We need to go around the block in every direction ... before the right path is found ... seems like our destiny |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow ... I was floored with this verse Rex! I had to read it again with Vincent Price's voice in my head ... just loved this! You've described the circle of life with such powerful sentiments ... incredibly well penned! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
{~,^} Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Kit ... thankyou very much ... I would like to hear Vincent Price read it as well ... this is my favorite poem ... but it does not appeal to everyone ... and I can live with that Sunny ... careful you don't brighten up this subject ... put your low beams on [This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Thanks Rex for the laugh and smile Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Amazing, a poem with such strength, and surprising ending too, great job, Rex!1 - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Very intresting way to put it. Hugs, Heather Without the experiance of love where would we be?We would have no wonderful memories to cherish.With love it brings hurt with hurt brings bittersweet |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Rex you never fail to amaze me, this is one of your best I think. Although you never write anything that's not excellant, this is soooo great. I loved the ending too. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
you're welcome Tracie ... glad you enjoyed it James ... thankyou sir ... very kind words Heather ... I thought so as I was writing it just seems to fit with the reason we're stuck on this planet Marsha ... you are quickly becoming a treasure ... thankyou for your kindness |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is an exceptional poem Great writing Liz |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
((((((((Voted))))))))) Jon |
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