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Dragon's Soul
Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 25

0 posted 2000-06-26 02:57 AM

She Screams out loud
but doesn't make a sound
She fights for her life
but the demons drag her down

darkness fills her soul
fire burns her brain
the pills that should help her
soon become her escape

she falls to the floor
never to awake
her kids come to mind
but it's better for them this way  

you must understand
she never wanted to die
she just wanted the pain to go away

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linda munday
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
1 posted 2000-06-26 08:11 AM

Suicide.. painful subject, dealt with well here.  Keep up the good work.  Nothing at all like my poems, but i liked it a lot.
Linda M.

since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
2 posted 2000-07-11 09:12 PM

interesting perspective on a touchy subject.  very well presented and great flow.  hope this one makes it in.

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love

Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
3 posted 2000-07-30 02:21 AM

Very good work here, and its a hard subject indeed.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
4 posted 2000-07-30 08:15 PM

Interesting poem. Can be seen in several ways. I choose to see her crying out for help from her torment, but nobody hears. Very nice.


Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Heather Miller
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409
Bryan, Ohio USA
5 posted 2000-07-30 10:08 PM

I know what she was feeling
I'm feeling the same  

Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no memories to cherish.
With love it brings hurt with hurt bittersweet memories.

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