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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
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An old'un from my new hampshire days. Mike -through a cracked pane- I look through a cracked pane and see blurred color. The trees are no longer wood But large stout strokes of brown Swimming in jagged detail against spider cracks. The air is a combination of yellow and green Mixed to a blue that changes continually, Where clouds float through the sea of it, And dip at the junction of broken glass. White fields spotted with brown and green trees And sunlight and frozen-over Lakes and ponds and stopped brooks Try to orient themselves in the fracture. |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Love this.....it brings terrific images. Bonnie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The air is a combination of yellow and green Mixed to a blue that changes continually, Where clouds float through the sea of it, And dip at the junction of broken glass. White fields spotted with brown and green trees And sunlight and frozen-over Lakes and ponds and stopped brooks Try to orient themselves in the fracture. ----------------- and now I too have looked thru a cracked pane... it was perfect, butterfly slippers thanks you  later-imagery-eyes-gator jm/bs |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi bsquirrel, You described it so wonderfully, your cracked pane of glass, enjoyed it very much, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
And thanks to all three of you for reading it.  Mike |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful, wonderful imagery! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
really amazing images. much enjoyed this poem. "An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots" joy division |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LittleSquirrel~ You rock with the images in this one. Deer tiptoes gingerly through the white fields. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
And thank you, three more. Seriously, though, I appreciate it, and am glad you enjoyed.Mike |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike~ This is very cool. I liked it a lot. -SEA ( you know I voted )Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hi, Sea (Hi-C?), thanks for stopping by. I can get used to your life, laughter and love. Mike |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I like seeing life through a new persepctive. Good'un ~Heather |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
As do I.  Joy |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks to both of you. (this is turning into a real yellow-face convention, isn't it?)Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
missed this the first time. Better late than never? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
B.E.A.U.T.F.U.L. I LOVE the imagery in this!!! I see it! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
S'en, Definitely, and thanks for finding it. Chris, Thanks for the kind words. Mike |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
yep, a keeper. nicely written. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, very well written, Mike! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
It was as though the "outside" (of your windowpane) turned into a Monet...the way you described the softness and shadings of colour and the blurring of the tree's trunks...very nicely painted, Mike. ** oops...forgot to vote ~ Claire< !signature--> Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, all. It's a good thing I checked back on these old threads -- I appreciate your keeping them alive for me. May everyone who submitted at least get one poem into the book.Mike |
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