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I Once Believed in Fairy Tales |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania ![]() |
I Once Believed in Fairy Tales I once believed in fairy tales with wondrous happy ends In sprites and gnomes and goblins and imaginary friends In magic wands and falling stars that make a dream come true I just couldn’t figure out where all the stars were falling to Ingenuous and tenuous And enviously new I used to think my heroes were among the best of men I thought that truth and honor were the words I could defend So innocent were my ideals, so resolutely fed That when deception tripped me up, I landed on my head So tenderly ingenuous And tenuously bred Battered, tattered, splattered, and well shattered was the dream Rumpled wings, a broken heart and empty self-esteem I weathered gale with tethered sail and tenets duly sworn What life unveils of fairy tales were pages cruelly torn Ingenuous and tenuous So strenuously worn I walk with grandson hand in hand reliving childhood dreams And marvel at his cleverness and never-ending schemes The magic of a falling star's a claim I can’t refute To now explain his future pain’s a question that is mute His tenderness so tenuous Ingenuously cute! Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
this is a beautiful poem Elizabeth so innocent yet forboding got my vote ![]() |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Liz, this is masterfully crafted, the scene with your grandson very poignant. Lovely piece of writing! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Very well planned and written. But then you always do that. I particularly enjoyed the evolving refrain, no that's not quite correct but what it sort of looks like. Geez, guess I'm rambling a bit here. Well I really enjoyed the read. Thanks. Pete |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully written. Start the presses. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To live within the eyes of a child where bunnys hop and horses run wild and again to dream the dreams of hope and allow for me my life to cope... Ah Elizabeth, ![]() just see what you do... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
walk with grandson hand in hand reliving childhood dreams And marvel at his cleverness and never-ending schemes The magic of a falling star's a claim I can’t refute To now explain his future pain’s a question that is mute His tenderness so tenuous Ingenuously cute! a wonderful poem, aw to once again have the innocence of a child. excellently written A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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LoveBug![]()
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Liz, I loved this the first time I read it, and I love it still! Great work. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, I'm so glad you posted this...I love the way you wrote it...excellent!! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
perfect elizabeth Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Still beautiful are these thoughts. Pricelessly portrayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
A beautiful and very well structured poem. Great job Elizabeth ![]() |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
What a wonderful poem! Well done! I look foward to reading more of yours.. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I really liked this...the format was neat! Good, good, good job!! ![]() ~Heather |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
My dear Liz, The words from that loving heart of yours just seem to always dance so gracefully across the page with such elegants and beauty I always leave with such a wonderful feeling inside, thank you so much. Love, Cerenity |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, If I could vote for this twice I would. Just wonderful. Love Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What an addition to the book ![]() |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
Absolutely wonderful! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
What can I say?!! ^_^ dear Elizabeth, you KNOW I will vote for this... ^^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Elizabeth your writings are so wonderfully written...well done ![]() Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
AWESOME!! I love this... miss you Lizzy... ![]() |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I enjoyed reading each and every one of your comments, which I hadn't noticed until today. I appreciate all of your remarks. Thank you all so very much. Liz |
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