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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The blooming A special dawn spreads early rays From a young summer sun; Dawn's born, twilight mist stays, Dewdrops on a bud, run Down, at a leisurely pace. Between the dawn and the morn, He stood enjoying the cool phase And gazed at a bloomer being born. As lovely petals uncurled, Nature's beauty unfurled; A tiny droplet shone, Diamond shaped, 'twas a unique stone A bead dazzling like a crystal sphere. Between the dawn and the morn, Happy sounds of birds he began to hear And awaited a bloomer being born. A garden where daisies and lilies posed, There blooming was a lovely rose; Impatient, waiting in front, of a door closed, Getting anxious, as the morning sun rose, A tiny wail, a shrill cry he heard, quite hoarse. 'It’s a boy', she said, 'and the mother is doing fine' Smiles all around. 'Congratulations', added the nurse And relieved, thanking God, he thought, 'the bloomer is mine'. [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I came back twice, trying to compose a reply. This was a cute piece and I liked it muchly, but am still at loss for the insightful witty reply I had so longed to write for you *wink* ~H |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
SI, Loved the double meaning. Of course, I'm not going to think too hard about that second stanza -- it's a garden. Yes, that's what it is. Mike |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
You have such a way with words . I really liked this one. ~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Sudhir - what a wonderful poem - just so touching --- ~netswan |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
*grinning* I liked this lots, nicely done! Oh and seeing as X hasn't got back to you with a witty reply, here's my effort Blooming marvellous poem old chap! Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You know I loved this Sudhir ... congratulations again on the birth of a wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sudhir~ This is soooo very nice! -SEA |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I enjoyed this very much!! It is interesting and unique!! Very cool!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
voting.....fer sure you know I love this one |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
YES!!! perfect poem to reflect your wonderful work and special talent jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hello gentle heart...and I remember this one...a favorite of mine....and yes, methinks these words should be read by everyone... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
sudhir, three times ive tried to vote for this and three times i've been kicked off yuh is that an omen ? no way cuz here i am back and just a submit reply away!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
{~,^} Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you each one of you... for reding, re-reading and posting your very kind comments... I feel gratified, and my deed seems to be done...The aim of writing the poem seems to have been achieved...how pleasurable it feels! regards to all, Sudhir. |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
nice one sudhir! luv Elyse |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How neatly you changed your bloomers! Nice work, sudhir. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Elyse, Thanks for reading and posting... Sir Balladeer, The blooming is now officially complete with your eyes sighting it...Thank you regards, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Such a lovely blooming, Sudhir! Really enjoyed reading this poem. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot Martie, I am glad that you enjoyed this blooming... Many regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love this poem I say "YES" Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is a poetic marvel, Sudhir, I enjoyed every line. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a wonderful poem Sudhir, lovely. As lovely petals uncurled, Nature's beauty unfurled; A tiny droplet shone, Diamond shaped, 'twas a unique stone A bead dazzling like a crystal sphere. Between the dawn and the morn, Happy sounds of birds he began to hear And awaited a bloomer being born. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very Nice indeed Sudhir Voting! My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Just precious. Now you've got lots of 'bloomers' to change. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, Claire, Brian, Dark Angel, Marge, I am really glad that you all enjoyed this poem... Thanks a lot to all of you for reading and posting wonderful responses... I await your response ever so keenly... Warm regards, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sudhir lyer, So beautiful and so much enjoyed. Cerenity |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Wonderful as always, my friend. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi Cerenity, Thanks a lot for reading and am very glad that you enjoyed it... I enjoyed it as much while writing it too... Marina, Thank you for reading and for your kind words... regards, Sudhir |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh WOW Sudhir I enjoyed this greatly..thanks Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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essenceofangels Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 36 |
Wow!what a extrodinary poem I loved it deeply Im new here but I cant wait to read more of your poetry! essenceofangels |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I can't say I've read your work before. Wow, I'm really missing something. This was excellent! I cannot find words to describe just what thoughts are running through my mind. So I won't try. But I will look for your work in the future! Beautifully done! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Tracie, How pleased I am to know that you enjoyed this... thanks Essenceofangels, thats a great compliment... thank you Whtdove, It feels wonderful to read such responses, and to know that I will have a great audience when I pick up my pen next time... Thanks regards, sudhir |
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Geoffrey Sonnen Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142Reading, PA USA |
Very beautiful, Sudhir. You had me till the very end. I also want to thank you ( I responded to you on my "Silence" entry, I believe.), I appreciate you hopeful words and your concern. *vote* God Bless Sudhir, Geoffrey |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Geoffrey, Many thanks... I am happy that a few words from me helped you in some way... regards, sudhir |
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