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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England 
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Originally written under a different pen-name, this remains my all time favourite poem that I have written. And yes, LOL, I have got witnesses that it is mine  The Dream. I blink in dawn's fresh golden light Beholding such a wondrous sight A vision that is fresh and fair Your silken sunlit fiery hair A spreading fan across my chest Where your dear head laid down to rest I stroke it gently from your face And gasp in awe at your sweet grace I watch your mouth, the soft moist lips Caress your cheek with fingertips Touching your alabaster skin I know more beauty lies within. I blink in dawn's fresh golden light And hope this dream returns tonight. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Well my original intention was to stuff the ballot box, but Ceres would know better. I love this poem Eric, I did the first time I saw it a long time ago! The rhythm and meter, and rhyme are all spot on! Kudos sweets on a magnificant piece of verbal art. ~Heather "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Eric! The flow is lovely, and the content so visual, beautifully penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Reading this for the first time...Oh, what pleasure... After reading this for a few more times, still ... Oh, What pleasure... nice work, Eric, very nice. regards, sudhir. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Nicely done Eric. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I do remember this under your other alias...loved it then as I do now!! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Eric, I always respect a poet who can speak of beauty without overwrought language and gushing sentimentality. Very cool. Mike |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Eric this just gushes with poetry motion love it! Great Choice ~netswan |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Eric~ I can see why you love this poem so much. It is beautiful. Wonderful job, and a wonderful dream. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Eric~this is wonderfully romantic........ just love it!  -SEA |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Well Eric, being a big fan of yours always, I do remember this poem, and many others similar to it.... You sure know how to say alot with so few words. Bravo!"Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
EXQUISITE POEM!!! absolutely stunning... no wonder it is your fav... amazing imagery and tender emotions jm |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Eric, This is very lovely. Cerenity |
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MissMilliToo New Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 7 |
I'm a Witness.... and I LOVE this DREAM...  [This message has been edited by MissMilliToo (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
I always enjoy a poem of well constructed couplets. It can be so difficult to construct but you have done so with eloquence. Pete |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
What a response!!!! I've just spent the whole evening reading some great poetry in this forum and I'm afraid I'm too tired to thank you all individually. Let me just say it is an honour to recieve such kind words from some of the greats here at passions THANKYOU! Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yer Velcome.... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Now only if that dream of yours can become a reality(Hint)...BRILLIANT!!! did I say it loud enough! LOL!!! |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Ahhh, at last it seems I have some time to write a proper thankyou to you all Heather, what can I say? to have a poem called "a magnificant piece of verbal art." by you is high praise indeed (even though you spell it magnificEnt :Þ~~~ (YES!!! Revenge IS sweet ))Kit, I'm glad you feel it flowed smoothly. I sat for hours just trying to get three more syllables without changing the meaning of the poem. This was a very special poem for a very very special lady and it had to be "perfect". Sudhir, If my poetry makes someone feel something and gives them pleasure once, I too am happy. To know that you read it "a few more times" and still gained pleasure from it makes me REALLY happy. Thankyou Thanks Chris, glad ya like! Sharon, you've got far too many posts as it is, but thankyou muchly for this one Mike, I wanted to say what was in my heart without resorting to overstatement... I'm glad you feel I managed it... thanks. *giggles* Thanks Netswan, now I can't get the song out my head!!! "Poetry in motion.." It was a wonderful dream and an even better reality when it finally came true. Thanks Cassandra SEA, not too bad for a man is it?  Femme, would a modest smile be enough of a reply? Thankyou! Janet Marie, exquisite reply LOL I'm getting a bit overwhelmed now... it's great to know I've made so many people really feel something through my words.Thankyou Cerenity. glad you like it. Call the next witness! Ah MissMilliToo thanks Yep, it can be hairtearingly difficult Pete, but worth it when it all comes together Nan, just cuz I give you cheeky replies doesn't mean you have to return the favour! Well, ok, it does Thanks pal!Romantic Heart, It DID!!!! Thankyou all, you have touched my heart. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Hi Eric, You made me go all squishy inside. Pleasurable reading. Linda M. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Wow can I borrow this dream? |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
What a wonderful dream!! To be thought of in such a sweet and enduring way!! Me LIKES this!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Thanks for reading and replying Linda. I hope it was a nice "squishy"! Sorry Rex, it's MY dream and I'm keeping it, but you're more than welcome to a copy of the poem to see if it inspires a dream of your own Thanks a lot for the reply.And thankyou Bridgette, me glad you likes Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Great dream ! Love it ! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It would be impossible not to applaud any poem that is so grammatically and structurally perfect and manages to contain such beautiful lines...not an easy task and yet you did it expertly..in other words, I like this one, Eric! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is one of those "BRAVO!" poems. That means yes Liz |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Oh my goodness! What a gem of a poem, this just sings. So much said, and so beautifully said, with few lines. Definately gets my vote! |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Munda, glad ya like! Thanks for your reply. Balladeer, *nods head self-deprecatingly in response to your kind praise* Liz, this is one of those "trying to think up an original thankyou" thankyous Thankyou Satiate, it's a pleasure to give so many pleasure Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric--what a perfectly done romantic sensory poem....I hope reality touches you the same way. Another vote for you! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is wonderful, Eric!! I absolutely love it! Denise |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well this is one of my favourites too well written... very lovely imaginary If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eric, You get a vote from me. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Thanks Martie... this dream has already come true once, now I just wait for it to return to my reality Thanks Denise, glad ya like it. Avanti, I am honoured! And thanks to you, Seymour, points make prizes Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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