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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Sailing through a stream of conscience I glide gently over its reflective surface, paddling with a shovel to unearth all my past whispers and future promises. I am to myself on this journey, seated on the crafted bark of a fallen Oak. Gaze at the sky where God holds his throne, I am stunned of breath at this ice blue ceiling stretching to infinity over all celestial planes. Its majestic presence towers over my dwarfed insignificance. The answers do not lie in the tranquilliser clouds where birds sail on the wind of dreams and spirits fall dumb in lack of oxygen. Little islands of failed ideology clot the waters and give sanctuary to the masses who wish to follow blindly. Encountering cannibals of independent thought, it is safer to adopt the mask of each ethic tribe; to sink into their traditions of brutal savages and parasites. These are my obstacles but I have focus and clarity of soul. Lost to a destination unknown, staring through the fresh waters observing in silent denial the ghost of my reflection in constant change until it is unrecognisable, incomprehensible. My youthfulness is eternal decay, drained to nourish an expanding intellect. Burdened with empty knowledge scratched upon my face, tangled barbed ivy conceals identity in chaotic overgrowth. Memory is malleable, contoured to suit a present purpose, each distortion peels away a layer of truth, until it fades as a falsely construed photograph. My mind holds jagged shards of images that will not gel together, as a puzzle without resolve. I am sailing for twenty years at least though I only just became sentient to this world. At first chaos plagued the mind, unable to grasp its complexity. Now my personality is at calm with its Siamese self, they are lovers under duress of my obsessions. Death and beauty are statuettes of darker seeds, where shallow God falls I rise in streams of conscienceness fragmented visions flow seamlessly from tributaries of psyche. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
ooooh this was a really cool poem, wrapped in wonderful literary paper.  I like! ~H |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Should I repeat myself and say BRILLIANT... why not??? Brian, you are one amazing poet... *My vote for this one for sure* Regards sudhir. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Nice one Brian.... chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you already know this is one of my faves of yours soo cooool soo deeeep so BRI  later wise gator jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was stunning, it reads with a flow and imagery that breathes expression. good choice, Brian Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Brian, Usually I blanch at message-heavy poems, but this is amazing just for the lines about paddling with a shovel, and tranquilizer clouds. Love your words. Mike |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Brian - always so deep ---This poem is delicious ----a reader's joy and a masterpiece ~netswan |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Wonderful Brian wonderful. Jon |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Brian ... if I copied all the lines I particularly loved, I fear I'd repeat the entire poem ... tremendous verse! Really wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderfully written Brian!  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're good, Brian...  |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
!! NUMINOUS !! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Brian, howdy again, I remember this one...got my attention twice.... |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
i remember this. just as nice the second time luv Elyse |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
X Angel, "wrapped in wonderful literary paper" does that mean I am in the book? LOL thanks for your wonderful response. Sudhir, thanks for the vote and reply. Sir, I am surrounded by amazing poets. chris, thanks for the reply. Jan, thanks. Can always count on you. Kathleen, thank your your kind words. Mike, I know that I lack subtlety in such matter sometimes. Thanks for your wonderful reply. netswan,thank you for your wonderful response, another porch poem. Jon, thanks. Kit, thanks for your kind words PDV thanks. Nan, good? only sometimes lol. don't let the irish charm fool you. thanks. Nancee, thanks, i think. serenity, thanks. Elyse, thanks again. "An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots" joy division |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. Enjoyed. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, I got to the end of this poem, and off my tongue out loud came the word amazing. Your way of illustrating your thoughts overwhelms my mind. You are a fine artist and I am blest to have eyes to absorb the extreme talent you exhibit. |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply incredible!!!!! Bonnie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Either a very great muse or a very talented poet wrote this one. I think it's the later Liz |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"paddling with a shovel to unearth all my past whispers and future promises." ..those 2 lines brought on my FIRST chill... as always brian..i stand in awe.. great work!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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