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since 1999-05-25
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Loomis, CA

0 posted 2000-06-21 12:42 PM

Looking down to see the scars,
scars from battles, some won, some lost.
The jagged line across the wrist
a battle of the soul - won or lost?
I can't really be sure.
The quarter-sized scar in the thigh,
.45 caliber they said when they pulled it out.
"You're damn lucky soldier, it's only a flesh wound."
How little they knew that it wounded much more.
We won that battle, so they tell me.
Years later, the battle still rages
and I am constantly on the losing side.
Many scars on the hand and fingers
from little battles through time.
Fights with the wall, a window, a bottle.
Too many mini fights to waste time on remembrance.
The counselor tells me that these are winner's scars.
"You are here, alive, and well - you have won"
Looking at him, I laugh inside.
How little he knows about war - no one ever wins.
Some of us just survive, and lose for eternity.
The scars inside are the most vicious looking.
Jagged, raw, ugly scars on my heart, my mind.
Those are the battle wounds most apparent to me.
I know longer see the outside marks, unless I look.
But I forever feel the inside disfigurement.
How can I heal the scars of murder?
How can I heal the wounds of a liar?
How can the spirit ever soar with wings clipped
by my own refusal to forgive?
I sigh, and look at the scars of battle
Some won - to leave me physically alive
others lost - to leave me in eternal death

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

© Copyright 2000 JP Burns - All Rights Reserved
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
1 posted 2000-06-21 02:55 PM

So real and true!!  Nicely done!!!!


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Dawn Eclipse
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
2 posted 2000-06-21 08:44 PM

Nicely done... Great tale!

"Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
3 posted 2000-06-21 08:59 PM

Reality at its grittiest. There are those who can relate to many things discussed here. Gets my vote...
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England
4 posted 2000-06-22 07:25 AM

Some scars never heal JP, but they do fade with time.


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

Poet deVine
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-06-22 09:40 AM

Some may not like to read this because it's so real, so true. But that is why I liked it.
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
6 posted 2000-06-22 07:02 PM

It was sad and also true
Well written and with such emotion
I loved it

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Esmeralda Ponsonby
since 2000-04-02
Posts 138

7 posted 2000-06-28 08:28 AM

JP, I am speechless, this is an intensely written poem, I could feel your every wound, I'm about in tears knowing how blind the world can truly be.
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
8 posted 2000-06-28 03:24 PM

I lost for words........and I'm sure glad you posted this so I could read it.
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
9 posted 2000-06-28 03:24 PM

Oops....must have spent too much time the Corner Pub  

[This message has been edited by Munda (edited 06-28-2000).]

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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
10 posted 2000-06-28 05:00 PM

JP, this is real life. Sometimes we have to be reminded. Wonderful job putting these feelings into poem, gets my vote.
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
11 posted 2000-06-28 10:21 PM

These are emotions known only through experience, my friend... You speak with wisdom.
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