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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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you promised me a garden, a place for love to grow you said you'll fence it with tender kisses circled with daisies and lilies and smiles with your two hands, in a gift of love you'll fashion a spot to dream away the days a secluded lover's haven, just for you, just for me a place where nature rules with free hand butterflies and bees, roses and apple trees all grown in wild abandon, left to nature's care but with a gentle guiding hand from time to time you promised a bed of columbines tended by your own loving hand grown with such gentle care you know they're my favorite flower your fingers tug at mine guiding me through fragrant summer blooms across garden path, to a secret spot (X marks the spot on our heart's map) you bid me close my eyes, a special gift I shall see honeysuckle perfume fills the heavy air my ears hear the hum of bees my feet feel soft moss carpet beneath I can sense the serenity of this place as you lead me gently forward and settle me upon plush seat my eyes open in rapturous wonder as this scenery unfolds, the red of the trumpet vine crawling over a rough hewn pergola, under which I am sat hummingbirds zoom by in a wicked competition for these bright red blooms, as bees buzz sleepily about your hand extends to mine, as you ask for this dance we move our bodies to the song of the birds singing with the bees joining in a rapturous chorus we dance so slow, in the dappled shade as you press your lips to mine < !signature--> "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 06-17-2000).] |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Wonderful imagery.... I could almost smell the flowers and hear the birds and bees playing their music. Quality  Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! A vivid picture painted with flowing words.  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Casting my vote here... Yep - I could really enjoy this - We can't be leaving your great work out now, can we??? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sensuous and warm. I can tell you choose your words with care. Mike |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Yes, such a gift and wonderful poem Enjoyed this. ~netswan |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I think this would make a strong addition to the book. I, uh, want, no, can't, uh, must -- be -- strong. Hah, nothing critical to say. Brad |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is beautiful, X Angel!! *vote* coming right up!!! This one is a must for the book!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful X Angel ... my senses were alive with imagery and fragrance. Thank you for taking me on this wonderful journey into the garden! Loved it! Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
X Angel~ this is so loving, so beautiful! I just love it! -SEA |
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Ryan Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 297Kansas |
Yep, I agree with everyone else. I like this. The imagery is wonderful. Also, the intensity builds up nicely from start to end. Ryan I like too many things and get all confused and hung-up running from one falling star to another till i drop. This is the night, what it does to you. I had nothing to offer anybody except my own confusion. —Jack Kerouac |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I always enjoy your free verse... and your imagery as well... this one is a very well written example of both jm |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very well written indeed!!! honoured to read this one... regards, sudhir |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I do so love the imagery in this!! So romantic!!! This is a wonderful poem!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear x angel, this is a beautifully romantic vision *sighs wistfully* i hope that one day i can inspire such feelings of love and romance in the woman i adore... a truly magnificent poem mingling the purity of nature with mankind's noblest state -- love... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Beautiful garden of words here! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am a sucker for love in a garden...beautiful! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
lovely imagery of a magical life! Corinne |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lovely, you painted a dream, a wish come true |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Awesome Heather ! |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Too enjoyable to describe. Guess you can tell I really liked it. Pete |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
To coin a word AWESOME. VOTED Jon |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey! You ran off without my vote! Take it! I demand you!!!  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I just want to thank all of you who took the time to read and reply to this poem, these words are a very precious part of who I am. Your comments really made me smile, and reminded me WHY I write. ~Heather "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
This is a wonderful poem full of glorious imagery and romantic magic. It should definitely be in the book. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I remember this one... yep... I do... did you post this at the scroll? or here?? can't remember.. but i do remember the fragrances and scents and dreams and love and reality of it ... it's such a special piece... thank you for posting this for the book, heather... hey, where's my "I voted today" button? hehe |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi X Angel This is so enjoyable, thank you so much for sharing. Love, Cerenity |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is so beautiful...it reminds me of a place close to my heart in my own back yard. I love the way you told this story of tender love. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
heather got to it at last .. beautiful .. but the vision of Brad trying to restrain himself is toooooo much ..lol P |
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