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X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
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0 posted 2000-06-17 05:18 PM

you promised me a garden, a place for love to grow
you said you'll fence it with tender kisses
circled with daisies and lilies and smiles
with your two hands, in a gift of love
you'll fashion a spot to dream away the days
a secluded lover's haven, just for you, just for me
a place where nature rules with free hand
butterflies and bees, roses and apple trees
all grown in wild abandon, left to nature's care
but with a gentle guiding hand from time to time

you promised a bed of columbines
tended by your own loving hand
grown with such gentle care
you know they're my favorite flower

your fingers tug at mine
guiding me through fragrant summer blooms
across garden path, to a secret spot
(X marks the spot on our heart's map)
you bid me close my eyes, a special gift I shall see
honeysuckle perfume fills the heavy air
my ears hear the hum of bees
my feet feel soft moss carpet beneath
I can sense the serenity of this place
as you lead me gently forward
and settle me upon plush seat

my eyes open in rapturous wonder
as this scenery unfolds, the red of the trumpet vine
crawling over a rough hewn pergola, under which I am sat
hummingbirds zoom by in a wicked competition
for these bright red blooms, as bees buzz sleepily about

your hand extends to mine, as you ask for this dance
we move our bodies to the song of the birds singing
with the bees joining in a rapturous chorus
we dance so slow, in the dappled shade
as you press your lips to mine

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"Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything."
--William Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 06-17-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Heather Walters - All Rights Reserved
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England
1 posted 2000-06-17 05:43 PM

Wonderful imagery.... I could almost smell the flowers and hear the birds and bees playing their music. Quality  


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-06-17 08:12 PM

Beautiful! A vivid picture painted with flowing words.  
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since 1999-05-20
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
3 posted 2000-06-17 10:26 PM

Casting my vote here... Yep - I could really enjoy this - We can't be leaving your great work out now, can we???
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

4 posted 2000-06-17 10:29 PM

Sensuous and warm. I can tell you choose your words with care.


Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
5 posted 2000-06-18 03:13 AM

Yes, such a gift and wonderful poem
Enjoyed this.


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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
6 posted 2000-06-18 05:25 AM

I think this would make a strong addition to the book.

I, uh, want, no, can't, uh, must -- be -- strong.

Hah, nothing critical to say.    


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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
7 posted 2000-06-18 06:49 AM

This is beautiful, X Angel!! *vote* coming right up!!! This one is a must for the book!!

Love and hugs,

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
8 posted 2000-06-18 09:16 AM

Beautiful X Angel ... my senses were alive with imagery and fragrance. Thank you for taking me on this wonderful journey into the garden!  Loved it!

Best wishes,

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with you
9 posted 2000-06-18 11:45 AM

X Angel~ this is so loving, so beautiful! I just love it!   -SEA
since 1999-06-10
Posts 297
10 posted 2000-06-18 12:27 PM

Yep, I agree with everyone else.  I like this.  The imagery is wonderful.  Also, the intensity builds up nicely from start to end.


I like too many things and get all confused and hung-up running from one falling star to another till i drop. This is the night, what it does to you. I had nothing to offer anybody except my own confusion.
—Jack Kerouac

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

11 posted 2000-06-19 11:46 AM

I always enjoy your free verse...
and your imagery as well...
this one is a very  well written
example of both

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
12 posted 2000-06-19 11:49 AM

very well written indeed!!!

honoured to read this one...

regards, sudhir

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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
13 posted 2000-06-19 07:42 PM

I do so love the imagery in this!!  So romantic!!!  This is a wonderful poem!!  


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown

Novacaine For The Soul
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122
New Orleans
14 posted 2000-06-19 07:48 PM

dear x angel,
     this is a beautifully romantic vision *sighs wistfully* i hope that one day i can inspire such feelings of love and romance in the woman i adore... a truly magnificent poem mingling the purity of nature with mankind's noblest state -- love...

a sad tomato

you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
15 posted 2000-06-19 08:30 PM

Beautiful garden of words here!
serenity blaze
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16 posted 2000-06-20 01:26 AM

I am a sucker for love in a garden...beautiful!
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
17 posted 2000-06-20 10:02 AM

lovely imagery of a magical life!


Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

18 posted 2000-06-20 10:17 AM

lovely, you painted a dream, a wish come true  
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since 1999-10-08
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The Hague, The Netherlands
19 posted 2000-06-20 10:35 AM

Awesome Heather !
Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
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Oklahoma, USA
20 posted 2000-06-20 11:29 AM

Too enjoyable to describe. Guess you can tell I really liked it.


Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

21 posted 2000-06-20 01:52 PM

To coin a word AWESOME.



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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
22 posted 2000-06-21 02:08 PM

Hey! You ran off without my vote! Take it! I demand you!!!  
X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
23 posted 2000-06-23 10:34 PM

I just want to thank all of you who took the time to read and reply to this poem, these words are a very precious part of who I am.
Your comments really made me smile, and reminded me WHY I write.


"Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything."
--William Shakespeare

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since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563

24 posted 2000-06-23 11:06 PM

This is a wonderful poem full of glorious imagery and romantic magic. It should definitely be in the book.


the poet's to airy nothing
A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
25 posted 2000-06-29 12:40 PM

I remember this one... yep... I do... did you post this at the scroll? or here?? can't remember.. but i do remember the fragrances and scents and dreams and love and reality of it ... it's such a special piece...

thank you for posting this for the book, heather...

hey, where's my "I voted today" button? hehe

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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
26 posted 2000-07-10 11:30 AM

Hi X Angel

This is so enjoyable, thank you so much for sharing.

Love,  Cerenity

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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
27 posted 2000-07-10 04:50 PM

This is so reminds me of a place close to my heart in my own back yard.  I love the way you told this story of tender love.
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
28 posted 2000-07-14 12:11 PM


got to it at last .. beautiful .. but the vision of Brad trying to restrain himself is toooooo much


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