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Tongues Of Fire
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Tongues Of Fire |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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"wake up baby, c'mon and take a look outside," she said, "there's a full moon shining in the morning light and there's a cool breeze blowing like a piper's pipe and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." there's the smell of fresh coffee floating through the door and I can hear her foosteps on the kitchen floor, the radio clock's playing an old Sinatra tune and I'm under a spell between the sun and the moon. Oh the lips of light you give to me, tell me your inward cares and the anxious hopes you need to speak are dreams you want to share and God sent you to rescue me from a heart locked in despair. Oh ..there's tongues of fire bringing me light, there's a voice in my soul calling my mind and there's a breath on my heart like a warm summer breeze and those old tongues of fire are glowing in me. I was answering the call on nowhere boulevard just a one way lover with ice in my heart, but these tongues of fire are melting the freeze and there's a vision setting me free. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, what a lovely, truly wonderful. It made me smile, and a smile is always welcome, so thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." ========================== and I'm under a spell between the sun and the moon. Oh the lips of light you give to me, tell me your inward cares and the anxious hopes you need to speak are dreams you want to share and God sent you to rescue me from a heart locked in despair. Oh ..there's tongues of fire bringing me light, there's a voice in my soul calling my mind and there's a breath on my heart like a warm summer breeze and those old tongues of fire are glowing in me. I was answering the call on nowhere boulevard just a one way lover with ice in my heart, but these tongues of fire are melting the freeze and there's a vision setting me free. ========================OH MAN!!!!!!! E baby this just rocks... I would walk on me lips to Canada to hear ya sing this one in person... man o man...do I love this one ... you have some amazing lines in here toots and as always your words are laced.. with your sweet emotions of love and affection for her... these things she inspires in you .. which is just so very cool later-love-song-gator jm |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
BRAVO!!! Fabulous!! If i quoted all the great lines, i'd have to quote the whole piece.... i wish i wrote this  |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
ethome, "wake up baby, c'mon and take a look outside," she said, "there's a full moon shining in the morning light and there's a cool breeze blowing like a piper's pipe and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." Wow ethome.. I LOVE this verse. That is all I can say. I love it rosepetals |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Oh, what a lovely verse ... singing softly on the flow of melodious phrases caught in early morning glow. I enjoyed this so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Marsha for your kind words. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
ethome...brother...very cool man... kinda jazzy...hmmm. i was answering the call on nowhere boulevard just a one way lover with ice in my heart... That rocks guy...yea i like this alot Tony |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was good, I had a rythym in my mind as I was reading it. I love the last three words, "setting me free"..........so much said there. Great flow! PS So you are a Canadian also. Nice to meet you. Jenn E |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh great poem easily imagined as a song |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--another wonderful melody plays from these words...and like JM said...I'd love to hear you sing it...but...walk on my ears...nope...I'd fly! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
BRAVOOOOOO!!!!! Ethome, this is one for the books of all books. The whole thing sings with passionate phrases each one shining on it's own...as they said it ROCKS. This one definitely goes into my personal file under FLAMING. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Janet as usual you are such a source of inspiration and encouragement to me. Thank you Doreen I wish I could write like you can so I guess it's a stand off, thanks again. Thanks Rosepetals for the fine words of encouragement. Marge I was trying to capture the morning glow of a new found love. I'm glad you saw it that way...thank you so much. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is beautiful! Very poignant, and a marvelous story woven into verse. Thank you! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am speechless, ethome, this is just vastly deep, and so incredible...loved your story, your imagery, it's all just perfect. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
ethome, Looks like you outdid us all on this one. What a superb piece of writing, each phrase bursts with images and emotion. You are quite a writer Liz |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, I think you have a great song writing talent, I hope your putting them the music.... amazing job here. Parker |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Well, let me climb aboard the bandwagon here...this is grand ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much T. McCoy, Jenn E, Hoot Owl, Martie and Mark I am so appreciative such wonderful comments..thank you once again! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is grand indeed! Love it!! Denise |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, what a song! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece was well-written and it flowed very well. I loved the last verse too. Nathan |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Rosemary, Serenity, Elizabeth, Parker and Claire you are all so very kind, thanks again. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Right On!~ *Loud and Clear* ~Definately dug this read~ Thank you E. Take care of yourself. *Peace. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for taking the time to read Denise, Sunshine and Nathan, I certainly will be looking for you as we travel through marvelous lines of poetry together..thank you once again! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you too spitfire for the kind remarks I will be looking for you. |
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jfilius Junior Member
since 2000-08-14
Posts 29 |
GREAT JOB!! I am gonna pick up my fiddle stick and start strummin! John |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Get that fiddle out John and away we go! Thanks very much for your reply. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
a great read and such a different pace ... loved it, ethome ... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Wow~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Great writing ethome...I'll just have to to be a groupie... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I don't know how I missed this saturday when you posted it - but sure am glad - I caught it now. - I can almost hear the notes - it sounds so singable (is that a word?) if you don't mind a suggestion - I think the 2nd verse - with slight modifications - could serve as a chorus I really loved this ethome - in a way you're speaking for me - and I suspect some others too. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you MA glad you liked the pace. Thanks Butterflies for the groupie comment I thought it was so cute. Thanks Wil Y I imagine there are many who can apply this to their own situation. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, This is a fabulous poem... what can I say but that I am awed by the poetry of it all... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sudhir thank you for such kind words, I'll be looking to drop in on you. |
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