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snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

0 posted 2000-09-21 11:40 PM

Open your heart to me;
Don’t be afraid
To bare your soul,
For I won’t judge
Anything I see there.
Who am I
To pass my opinions
On something so precious?
Would I be so foolish
To take this privilege
And treat it
As if it were my right?
Dear Friend,
I know there are fears
You need to face,
Let me be the one
To lead the way.
When you see
The rain clouds rolling in,
Don’t run for cover--
I’ll be standing beside you,
Waiting to shield you
So you may watch
The splendor of the downpour,
But remain safe.
Don’t worry
If you’ve made a mess
Of your life,
For I’ll be there
To help you pick up the pieces
And figure out
Where each one belongs.
I need you to know
That something about you
Keeps me close;
Something in your soul,
Which shines through your eyes,
Keeps a constant fear
Of losing you
In my mind.
I’m compelled to have you near,
I’d do anything
Just so you’d want
To make your home
With me.

Trew
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Ottawa, Canada

1 posted 2000-09-22 12:05 PM

Man, oh man... there is some incredible poetry out here tonight! I am a sucker for free verse, it's my favourite form. You have this one flowing like a river, my friend.
It has such a genuine, honest, loving feel to it. The shelter, the shattered pieces, the safety before the downpour. What great images. What else can I say? Wow!

Trev.

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

2 posted 2000-09-22 12:13 PM

I wasn't too sure about this one, but you've given me confidence!! It has a lot of meaning for me--that's the main reason I posted it. But, now I know you enjoyed it, too! Thanks, Trev!!

sp

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

3 posted 2000-09-22 12:23 PM

hiya SNOWPANTS

Firstly, I think your username is sweet

Secondly, I found this poem a pleasurable read and what you have expressed in this ryhme is soooooo enchanting; you have said above that it has great meaning to you ... well this shines thru

Coco

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

4 posted 2000-09-22 12:27 PM

Very cool pattern of flow and the whole verse reads of sweetness and definition of true love.

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

5 posted 2000-09-22 12:27 PM

Thanks, Coco! Glad you liked it!

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

6 posted 2000-09-22 12:29 PM

Thanks, Mark! I didn't get your reply until after I posted my thanks to Coco!!

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