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ggrn3
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0 posted 2000-08-18 07:45 PM


Walking beside the river in the early morning
Watching newborn sunlight dance off ripples
Like fireworks in the night
The water is like many diamonds sparkling
Trees sway in the wind, fighting to stay upright.

The ripples crash gently against the riverbank
Like miniature waves from the sea
The water is so clear and hypnotizing
As it creeps by so majestically.

The wind and trees create a harmonic melody
Birds sing and swing to the tone
Bushes & butterflies dance vigorously in the breeze
While dragonflies and bees buzz on.

Creeping thru the thick underbrush
Treking along the river path
Kicking off the glistening dew drops
That hang like pearls from the grass.


Garfield

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Bill Charles
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1 posted 2000-08-18 07:47 PM


Hi ggrn3,
This is really nice, has a flow and reads great. And the words to me were very uplifting.

Denise
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2 posted 2000-08-18 08:14 PM


Beautiful!

Denise

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3 posted 2000-08-18 08:38 PM


Leaves you wondering where to find such a magnificate place...

-jaimie
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Dawn Eclipse
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4 posted 2000-08-18 09:57 PM


What a beautiful poem... beautiful picture it created in my mind. Keep writing.  I enjoyed this one.  

"The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper."
Eden Phillpotts
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5 posted 2000-08-18 10:04 PM


GGRN~
Ahhhh ... you've taken me on a walk I enjoyed.
Nothing ... absolutely nothing like communing with nature.

Beautiful images.
~*Marge*~


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ggrn3
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6 posted 2000-08-19 12:08 PM


Thank you all for your kind comments.  Hopefully I 'll be able to continue to write and present you with more appealing works.  When they say "your your own worst critic," I know what they mean.
Again thank your all for your encouraging comments.< !signature-->

Garfield

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Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-08-19 12:16 PM


Beautiful imagery here and your flow in this piece is superb......by the way....belated welcome to Passions and I am sorry it took so long to do so.  Lovely piece.
Elizabeth
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8 posted 2000-09-17 11:19 AM


Let the river flow...

Paula Finn
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9 posted 2000-09-17 11:28 AM


OOHHHHHHHH can I walk with you? This is lovely
ggrn3
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10 posted 2000-09-17 07:34 PM


Mrs. Elizabeth & Mrs. Paula

I posted this some time ago.  I thought it had ran it's course as far as responses.  I'm so glad that you both liked this piece.  This poem came about from remembering the fishing trips with my father in the early morning.  Things were always so pleasant and peaceful and the scenery beautiful.  I just tried to paint a picture with words of what I observed on those mornings.
Thanks for kind words and taking the time to read this one.

Garfield

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11 posted 2000-09-20 12:14 PM


what a lovely walk.... was looking back few some old post and found this....

GE

ggrn3
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12 posted 2000-09-20 12:24 PM


Greeneyes
  I so glad you went back and read some old post.  I glad you were able to walk with me on this small journey.
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words.

Garfield

Kit McCallum
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13 posted 2000-09-20 12:38 PM


What a beautiful picture you've painted with your words ... I feel as though I'm invigorated from a fresh walk myself now ... thanks for the lovely journey!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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14 posted 2000-09-21 08:55 AM


Sounds as though you daydream more than fish.
Great poem- very refreshing.
Melton

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15 posted 2000-09-21 09:12 AM


a most impressive walk - I could feel and picture it in intricate detail  Well done!
ggrn3
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16 posted 2000-09-22 12:27 PM


Kit
  It was worth writing if this piece invigorated and refreshed you in anyway.  I so glad you enjoyed it and thanks so much for reading and your kind words.

Melton
  I do daydream quite a bit, but I also enjoy nature at its best.  I also like to fish although I don't go as often as I would like. Suggestion:  go fishing very early one morning to the nearest river.  Do not fish from the boat, but from the bank. I'll bet if you sit back and take it all in, you see this poem in its entirity.
  Thanks for reading and your kind words.  I hope you like this as much as I liked your writes. I'm still laughing at "It's a Miracle" & "Deer vs. LngJhnAg."


Wilfred Yeats
  I'm always honored when you stop by to read.  If I've impressed you with this one, I feel that I've accomplished something.  
Thanks for stopping by to read and your very kind words.

Garfield

Chanson
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17 posted 2000-09-22 01:10 AM


Such a descriptive river walk. How can we not enjoy it? I certainly did  

...chanson~

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18 posted 2000-09-22 01:15 AM


"Pearls from the grass..very lovely indeed.
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