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If I were going to need you...
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If I were going to need you... |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
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If I were going to need you And admit you were the one Who stole my heart in secrecy As shadows stole the sun I'd have to turn myself around Plant firm against my fears Let loose my inhibitions Admit to shedding tears I'd have to look inside myself And show you what I see Soul, naked as the Emporer With hope you'd still love me I'd have to lay my pen down And talk to you sometime About the dark or glowing thoughts That occupy my mind If I were going to need you And the man that I could be I would give you all of this and more Upon my bended knee. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Trev, This was a pleasant surprise tonight my friend!!! It is so beautiful and romantic. Absolutely amazing writing.  Thank you for sharing and stopping by!! Jen Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Trev this was just great... Really loved it. Juls |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Very good. I enjoyed the read. I liked the feelings of honesty I drew from it. Keep up the good work. |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
This strikes some simple nostalgic chord in me. I really liked it. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
This is wonderful! Definately one of my favorites of this challenge series! |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
This peek inside of you is breathtakingly beautiful, Trew.< !signature--> ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -Song of Gesture [This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"If I were going to need you And the man that I could be I would give you all of this and more Upon my bended knee." I love those lines, Trev! (and, of course, the rest of the poem!) So beautifully romantic!! Great writing! sp  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now that is what I call romance...wonderful read from you..loved it alot. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This poem you have written is beyond words of rhyme... AN INCREDIBLE READ and thank you for posting this today as I really needed a boost! TGIF2morrow Dani [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-22-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This is really beautiful. A lovely read!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Thank you all! This was the first challenge that I have taken part in and boy, was it a fun one! Jenn~ I was only going to peek in last night, but the challenge just sort of grabbed me! Thank you for the high praise, it is much appreciated. Still looking on ICQ... Juls~ So glad you enjoyed it! It's nice to know you are there to read my work! Thank you! Alan~ All honesty, my friend. It's something that I finally allowed myself to do. Thanks for your reply! grandiloquent~ Love is the simplest of all emotions! I'm glad you stopped in! Thanks! Tenn~ Wow! With all of the submissions, that is truly a huge compliment! Thank you very much! chanson~ Thank you! It is only now that I am able to open the door a little and allow myself to be seen. I'm glad you liked the view! sp~ No doubt about it, If I am truly going to need someone, that is the only way to show it! I'm glad you liked it! Mark~ From someone who's poetry I respect so much, that is very nice to hear. Thank you! Coco~ Wow! Thank you for the great compliment! I'm glad that I could help raise your spirits. May Friday be a wonderful day for you! And the weekend, as well! Beth~ Well, thank you! This was a strange one... I wrote it as though it were being dictated to me. I guess it's sometimes not so much the poet, as it is the inspiration. Still waiting for that dance!  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've penned the only way to need...all or nothing! Beatiful work Trew, I'm glad this was a challenge you took part in!! |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Oh Myyyyy, Oh Myyyyyy, Oh Myyyyyyy, I am so gald I stopped in to read. This was so beautiful and romantic. Just a really wonderful write! Jenn E |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
WoW, how did I miss this one, It's soooo romantic and soft, I think I may have to keep it. Kethry  "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
Very cool. I liked your poem very much. Openness and honesty is the only way to go. great read. Keith |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
The thought of being needed, by anyone other than my children, scares me. After reading your poem, I'm thinking it would be wonderful to be needed. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Trew~ You did a wonderful job on this. 'I'd have to look inside myself And show you what I see' That's where it starts - inside ! Enjoyed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
a lovely write..enjoyed.. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Trev...how very beautiful my friend...you say everything with a touch so soft so sweet it just takes my breath away |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
the willingness to bare your true self cos u love someone...dig the sentiments here |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
B_d_c~ I found that it is the only way, indeed. I need it all! Thank you! Jenn E~ I'm very glad you stopped in as well. Thank you for taking the time and for your compliments! Kethry~ Poetry, like love, is to be shared. I'm honoured that you would keep this. Thanks so much! Keith~ It's for a pretty cool feeling, my friend! And you're right, honesty says it all. Thanks for reading and replying! Tara~ My goodness! That is a wonderful compliment. Being needed is, perhaps, the best feeling of all... when it's from someone that you need as well. Thank you very much! Marge~ It's all about the inner you. To love not only despite the faults, but rather because of them. Thank you for taking time for me, it's a great compliment! Victoria~ Thank you so much! Paula~ I am always so humbled by your replies, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one. Now catch your breath and post another beauty!  kaile~ Glad ya dig it!  Love really does need to be unconditional to be true. Show it all. Thank you! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I couldn't have said it better myself Trev. . . this is really great!!! Well done my friend. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
A beautiful way to say it. Challenge well met, and thank you for taking the time. I enjoyed reading. My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Trew-Truely eleoquent and very romantic! I liked! |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Lovely! You write such a sweet beautiful poem! I really enjoyed it! |
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