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If I Were Going to Need you (Temptress Challenge)
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If I Were Going to Need you (Temptress Challenge) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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(never actually found the challenge, but after reading the wonderful works of Wilfred, Martie, Temptress' own, Masked Intruder, CoCoBaci and Kethry...sorry if I missed any...I hope this piece fits. Jimmy) How Would I Know? To hear your voice, your laugh, the tiny sigh you make, the way you rustle when you twist and turn, the pad of your feet across the floor; To see the sparkle in your eyes, your smile, your nose, your hair about your face, the way you look at me; To touch your hand, your cheek, your lips, your heart, your soul; to feel the warmth of your body next to mine… and yet you dare to ask, if I were going to need you, how would I know. w. james beard, jr. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jwesley--I love this tender message...how could she indeed...after such sweet pieces of her you have sparkled all over the page. |
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Michat New Member
since 2000-09-21
Posts 3 |
This is terrific and the ending verse 'and yet you dare to ask if I were to need you how I would I know" WoW!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
jwesley, This indeed meets the challenge and well met it is. btw the challenge can be found in the poetry challenge section, see main menu.  be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
A voice, a sparkle, a touch A sigh of warmth to share Your presence shall be remembered If ever a need was there... jw your words were beautiful, very ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
ooohh this caught the breath in my chest! This was tender and sweet. *sigh* ~Heather |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very good James... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Challenge well met. I like the way you only used the line once in this...and at the end too. Lovely. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JWesley~ Very softly complete. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
I agree with Marge, very softly complete.... just padded its way across the page.. and into the heart. Lovely... Linda Munday |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
This is a perfect testament to love. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh James how simply lovely. What a tender and loving heart you have. Juls |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
jwesley, i enjoyed the swift way this poem paddled me to the ending...."and yet you dare to ask, if i were going to need you, how would i know?".....marvellous ending |
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