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Martie
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0 posted 2000-09-20 09:07 PM



If I were going to need you
I’d listen every time
I heard you breathe into my ear
the sound would be sunshine

I’d treasure every little word
and keep them locked somewhere
with silk and lace forget-me-nots
pressed in a book of dare

And if you said how much you cared
I’d hold each tender word
and find my heaving need for them
by vision that is blurred

If I were going to need you
how would I let you know
oh dance across the sky I would
and shine each night love’s glow

But you know I don’t need you
my heart is so secure
it never flutters with midnight
in places that you stir

It doesn’t giggle at your jokes
nor feel your heated sighs
and never will it break apart
if time took you to fly

So I am fine my heart intact
and yes, I feel sublime
so please don’t read between the lines
and look for little signs

If I were going to need you




© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-09-20 09:16 PM


Beautiful, Martie!! It's a special treat for me when you rhyme too!! Both you and Marge in one night, Wow!!

Denise

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2 posted 2000-09-20 10:29 PM


to read you rhyming and even more beautifully - truly is inspiring ~S~ - this is lovely Martie  
Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2000-09-20 10:33 PM


What a wonderful flow Martie! I enjoyed your thoughts in this piece ... very nicely rhymed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2000-09-21 12:37 PM


My sweet friend....you have penned a beauty and in such perfect flow of rhyme.  Well now I wonder who would be needing who at this point...sort of like DON'T!!!!!! STOP!!!!!!!  don't stop...don't stop...!!!!!!!!whew...sorry bout that but cowboy just came in off the range.  You know I loved it and you as well my friend.  My sweetie is going to love this one of yours.
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5 posted 2000-09-21 12:58 PM


smiling here... I so enjoy your sojourns into the world of rhyme...
Kethry
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6 posted 2000-09-21 06:49 AM


Martie,
sensitive and rhyming. Wow a double bonus.
Be well
Kethry


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but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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7 posted 2000-09-21 08:08 AM


Martie~
If I were going to need you ...
I'd look for you among these lovely thoughts.

You did it up awesome, gal.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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8 posted 2000-09-21 10:38 AM


a rhyme
this time
for Denise
sublime...thanks.

Bill--I'm glad you found some inspiration in this...thanks.

Kit--thank you...I always enjoy your sweet replies.

Mark--You make me smile, once again.

Kethry--Thanks for reading and for the sweet comment....

Marge--you are the awesome one!


X Angel
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9 posted 2000-09-21 11:11 AM


lovely!  

brian madden
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10 posted 2000-09-21 01:55 PM


Martie, beautiful lovely verse.

My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy divison

[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 09-21-2000).]

Sunshine
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11 posted 2000-09-21 02:02 PM


O Martie...that's it..I'm speechless...
Martie
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12 posted 2000-09-21 03:43 PM


Heather--thanks so much for that lovely word lovely.

brian--So glad to see you...always enjoy your replies.

Sunshine--You can't be speechless...you are the sound in my poem
'the sound would be sunshine'

Temptress
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13 posted 2000-09-21 08:45 PM


Here is yet another wonderful challenge poem.   I like the telling without admitting idea in this.  

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