»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #9
»
If I were Going to Need you.......Temptress challange
| Open Poetry #9 |
|
If I were Going to Need you.......Temptress challange |
|
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
|
If I were going to need you I’d listen every time I heard you breathe into my ear the sound would be sunshine I’d treasure every little word and keep them locked somewhere with silk and lace forget-me-nots pressed in a book of dare And if you said how much you cared I’d hold each tender word and find my heaving need for them by vision that is blurred If I were going to need you how would I let you know oh dance across the sky I would and shine each night love’s glow But you know I don’t need you my heart is so secure it never flutters with midnight in places that you stir It doesn’t giggle at your jokes nor feel your heated sighs and never will it break apart if time took you to fly So I am fine my heart intact and yes, I feel sublime so please don’t read between the lines and look for little signs If I were going to need you |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Martie!! It's a special treat for me when you rhyme too!! Both you and Marge in one night, Wow!! Denise |
||
|
Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
to read you rhyming and even more beautifully - truly is inspiring ~S~ - this is lovely Martie  |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful flow Martie! I enjoyed your thoughts in this piece ... very nicely rhymed! Best wishes, /Kit |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My sweet friend....you have penned a beauty and in such perfect flow of rhyme. Well now I wonder who would be needing who at this point...sort of like DON'T!!!!!! STOP!!!!!!! don't stop...don't stop...!!!!!!!!whew...sorry bout that but cowboy just came in off the range. You know I loved it and you as well my friend. My sweetie is going to love this one of yours. |
||
|
Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
smiling here... I so enjoy your sojourns into the world of rhyme... |
||
|
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Martie, sensitive and rhyming. Wow a double bonus. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ If I were going to need you ... I'd look for you among these lovely thoughts. You did it up awesome, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
a rhyme this time for Denise sublime...thanks. Bill--I'm glad you found some inspiration in this...thanks. Kit--thank you...I always enjoy your sweet replies. Mark--You make me smile, once again. Kethry--Thanks for reading and for the sweet comment.... Marge--you are the awesome one! |
||
|
X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
lovely! |
||
|
brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Martie, beautiful lovely verse. My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy divison [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 09-21-2000).] |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
O Martie...that's it..I'm speechless... |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Heather--thanks so much for that lovely word lovely. brian--So glad to see you...always enjoy your replies. Sunshine--You can't be speechless...you are the sound in my poem 'the sound would be sunshine' |
||
|
Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Here is yet another wonderful challenge poem. I like the telling without admitting idea in this. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
