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If I Were Going to Need You (I Wouldn't!)
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If I Were Going to Need You (I Wouldn't!) |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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If I were going to need you, I wouldn't instead, I'd remind my heart of all the broken promises and things left to falter If I were going to need you, I wouldn't I'd invoke the power of love unattended drowning in the quagmire of seasonal somewhat alone If I were going to need you, I wouldn't I'd make you tell my heart why it's shuttered and dark now for you built the shutters with your own hands If I were going to need you, I wouldn't especially now, when the nights are cooler and my bed so empty would I trade a night for a life? If I were going to need you, I wouldn't I wouldn't fall for your promises one more time, now or ever I'd laugh and just walk away I wouldn't need you, even if I was going to |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Heather ... there's such strength and power through these lines. Like a mantra, if we will it, so it shall be. Powerfully written, and with such conviction, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
In my lifetime - I've been married twice - (at the moment still with #2), known and loved women who've "made the same mistake 2-3 times" and the consensus is most would not make it again. With me - hope springs eternal - I've seen some wonderful marriages - so - my thinking remains as it always has - lovers are meant to be couples - This is not to say I do not understand your thinking and your feelings - Give yourself time - we're not all *******s, as all women are not *****es. (sermon over ~G~) |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Kit~ thanks sweetie Wilfred~ this was aimed directly at my ex, not at men in general. Though I must say I look at all of your species with a cautious eye now. Once burned twice shy and all that rubbish...yanno Thanks for the reply, and with me hope springs eternal too, it will just take time for me to realise that I can trust someone again.~Heather |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know many people who do trade that night for a life... forgetting that the loneliness will be worse when they're still "alone" mentally and emotionally... even if the bed is warmer. *S* You owe yourself more than that... and this poem says you know it! *S* Well done! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
XAngel Whhhhoooooeeeeee! that is one powerful poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Heather, well said and well done. The charm makes it hard sometimes not to go back, but in the end you do what you think right. Take care. Dee |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Greener pastures and all that, my friend...once burned, twice shy is a fable made by people who believe in it...ya got to keep looking to find Mr./Mrs. Right...can't ever give up...love's too wonderful. Nicely said and done...enjoyed...jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm with jwesely heather, love is too beautiful...keep your heart open, give it some time..you have become wiser now...this powerful poem proves it...yup!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
X Angel, Way to go!!! I see such strength and conviction here. Good for you, girl!!! Looks to me like you don't need him at all!! Great writing!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
our species???? pork, perhaps???  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
bttt |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
hm.... and here I am the eternal optimist.. There must be somebody who can NEED us equally, ya think?? |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Suthern~ thanks girl! It is tough at times, but the end result is worth all the crap I gotta go through right now. Kethry~ thanks for the boost! And yep this poem was definitely all about reminding myself I can do it without him (and like it! LOL) Dee~ LOL @the charm, I know exactly of what you speak! jw~ I know all men aren't the "abandoning" type, I do. Thanks for the reply Martie~ yep yep yep..WISER! Tougher! Stronger! Smarter! (lol and alot more cynical! *sigh*) LW~ nope I sure don't need him! remember...it's all about girl powuh! *wink* Deer, Dear...as long as there's some sort of sauce involved you and I should get along very well *smirk* Nan~ there is! He is prolly right under our noses sweetie..... *hugs* ~Heather |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This was full of a kind of sad strength. It teaches a lesson and seems to set someone straight. Challenge well met. |
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