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Wounded Ship
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Wounded Ship |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Wounded Ship Sail away wounded ship With your ghosts of heartaches past Make way old worn vessel For "peace" I've found at last I have filled your ocean full of tears For far: far too many years Now the waves are no longer crashing And my heart no longer fears Bellow your sails, with wicked winds And rock straight into hell Do not dock at any port Let no other, hear your bell Sail away wounded ship Back from whence you came Your tears will rain with thunder For heartbreak is your name © tori 2000 |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tori~ This one is power-packed. 'Your tears will rain with thunder For heartbreak is your name' So good to see you here. Please drop in more often. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
Wow Tori Sounds like a butterfly has broken free from an unneeded casing and emerged into the sunlight at last to test its wings in the gentle winds.... Great read hope to see more...nona |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks so much Marge~ and Nona |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Tori.... I agree with Marge.....this one packs a punch, with well-thought out verses! Great job here, my friend! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Love it girl! Rocks the boat  I haven't forgot about ya...been busy, give me some time I'll work on it some more ko?  Love ya HUGS |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks~Dove~ I know how time goes... so take as much as you need....  )Thank you Sunny1 I'm glad you like~ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This was wonderful..loved it..  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
A terrific plea, and a resounding rejoice - superb writing, Tori. I enjoyed this poem very much. I especially like the ending. A terrific metaphor you've written. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks there LngJhnAg! If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful the way you have put this... I know the beauty of finding peace after a heartbreak has mortally wounded a heart...time passes slowly and when peace arrives it is full of cleansing and purity....James |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Yes, powerful indeed. This was great, full of hope and inspiration for all those who read. Thank You. May I say I am so glad you have found your inner stregth.Jenn E |
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