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To Show Her I Don't Care......from the mothballs
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To Show Her I Don't Care......from the mothballs |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Arriving from the bar last night, What strange thing did I see? A message on the phone that said My girl was through with me. How could she do this thing to me? I mean, how could she dare?! I had to show that silly girl That I just didn't care! I had to make her feel the pain Of giving me the air. I called her up to tell her just How much I didn't care. The phone was busy all night long! It really wasn't fair. She should have had call waiting so She'd know I didn't care. This morning I jumped out of bed And hurried over there To prove to her, once and for all, How much I didn't care. I stood there on the sidewalk, Looked completely unaware, And, when she'd pass, I'd turn away To show I didn't care. But she must have left early which Is really something rare And so I lost my chance to show How little that I cared. No matter. To her job I went. The guards gave me a stare And wouldn't let me in to show Her that I didn't care! So all day long I waited. Now My nerves began to wear. I had to let her know how much I really didn't care. Missed her again! This turned into A horrible nightmare. Why should it be so hard to show This girl I didn't care? So here I am, at midnight, Bushes tangled in my hair. This time I have the perfect plan To show her I don't care. I'll toss stones at her window so That she will be aware That I don't even miss her and I truly do not care! Gee! Look at those round, flashing lights! And what's that bright red glare? Methinks it's best to wait a bit To show her I don't care. I'll return again tomorrow and I'll end this sad affair. She'll really feel bad when she Sees how I just don't care. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 09-18-2000).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
LOL! Well...Better luck next time? I'm enjoying your work as always. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Hmmmmmm I think it's pretty cool to "not be cared about" by you...lol...I love your sense of humor!! Thank you for the smile  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my oh my ... I do so love moth balls  love this sweet treat of a poem as well. awesome....you are jm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
One of my favorites!! Thanks for reposting it!!  Denise |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Balladeer I haven't seen this before so I am glad you posted it again. I love it - enjoyable reading. didi |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Yeah !  Well, you showed her, huh ? Loved it - moth balls and all. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grinnin' again...and y'know, this brings to mind a story...oh. nevermind. I'll spare you tonite. LOL my dear Balladeer! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
cute one, michael!!  glad to see the repost... never read this one before... you are quite the Poet, y'know? from the mothballs.. hehe... this was delightful!! put a grin on my face.. thank you for reposting this, sweet poet! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hadn't seen it before so I am glad as are the others that you reposted this one. You got her on the run it sounds like. She just won't give you that chance to show you don't care. Great read my friend. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How come the stuff I drag out of mothballs never looks this purty? *G* (Guess that ole theory of "garbage in, garbage out" is true? *G*) Great read again... keep avoiding those cops... we'd miss you. *G* |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Balladeer, this one was so wonderfully witty, and reminiscent of Shel Silverstein, one of mine and definately one of your favorite poets. I only found one tiny flaw...you have a 't' on through in the 4th line of the first verse. Other than that...this one smacked of perfection, despite the slightly musty odor of mothballs... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I just love the humor you brought to this piece...I can just see you in handcuffs explaining that you "just dont care" |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
wow...wonder what you would do if you "really" cared...gave me a chuckle and of course the rhythm was great... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
masterful... a verse that should be read aloud to every high school student... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I just don't care" that this came out of mothballs ... because it's new to me! Keep pulling them out Micheal, and I'll keep reading. Fantastic story ... I love your sense of humour! Best wishes, /Kit |
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