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If I give You My Words
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If I give You My Words |
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lb New Member
since 2000-08-27
Posts 7California |
If I give you my words written upon the pages of a flipbook that I've made to be read through the ages If I give you my paintings my drawings from the soul pasted and glued on sheets from hands that paid the toll If I give you these feelings my love bound in a book all scrambled up together would you even take a look Would you cherish this forever would you see what does impart when you hold this book close to you in your hand you'd hold my heart |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow!  What a delightful nugget of poetry to find here. I can relate to this, and have often wondered the same things of different people. In reading my writing, they read my heart. Excellent.Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
To look through some one elses eyes at the way they see love its great, I love you poem |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Lori, I like this one. As I've said before you are a "mood writer". I sense a pensiveness, and an air of nostagia as you wrote this one. I really enjoyed it, and I'm glad that you are posting at Passions. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is a gem of a poem... I've read it twice I adore the soft flow of rhyme you've entwined... I look forward to reading many more... Regards Coco |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to the Forum! Passions has everything-if you want critique, they have that, if you want to share your words more casually,it's the best place in the world to touch another heart and have your own enriched, I believe. I like the honesty in this, and the flow is a very easy read. Again, welcome. Kathleen |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was a great poem.....I really liked the flow of it. Jenn E |
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lb New Member
since 2000-08-27
Posts 7California |
Thanks for the positive comments guys. Sorry I posted and dashed off to a boyscout campout and a hike this morning and then off to the county fair this afternoon. I'm bushed but will come here tomorrow to read and comment on others posts. You guys sure do write a lot, this place fills up fast! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What a wonderful little piece of your heart. I am so glad you joined us here at Passions and do not apologize for doing real life things. We will always be here when you return. Nice to meet you and look forward to seeing more of your little gems like this. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LB~ A delightful little gem ... 'when you hold this book close to you in your hand you'd hold my heart' Welcome to Passions ! You're gonna like it here. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
lb, Welcome to Passions!! Very nice post here. So honest and full of longing. I hope your special someone gives the answer that you seek. Looking forward to more of your work. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
lb This was a great piece. I loved the style and the rhyme you had within. I've always wondered if the person who read my work knew that they were holding a piece of my heart. Welcome to Passions. I became addicted to it when I first found it. You won't be able to read all the post here, but the ones you do read will be excellent. Garfield |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
lb, That was great! All too often, people take for granted, or, don't even realize, the beautiful thing they hold in their hands. Nicely written!  sp |
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