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Of You (hat trick cinquains)
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Of You (hat trick cinquains) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Breathing Your tangy musk Filling me with hunger Promising your loving come dusk Of you. Tasting Your daring spice Filling me with hunger Promising sating enticement Of you. Touching Silky caress Filling me with hunger Promising me lazy undress Of you. Hearing Licking fires Filling me with hunger Promising mounting desires Of you Gazing eye's burning flame Filling me with hunger Promising me passion's claiming Of you |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WHEW....Wilfred my man....are you sure this is in the right place? Very sensuous write my friend...very honest and like I said .......HOT!!!!!  The ladies will be loving this one. Romance undaunted |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wilfred you amaze me with your cleverness. This piece is  Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--Nicely done, but...it is rather hot in here...wheeew!!! (fanning self wildly) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Analyzing these five verses, I would say the first three comprise a hat trick with no assists, the fouth lures the reader into overtime and the last wins by "sudden death". A perfect game! Seriously, very beautiful and sensuous writing Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mark- Ever since I learned that it is the words and not the substance that sets a passionate piece in adult - I have enjoyed sliding my thoughts more into the sensuous realm. Thank You Kethry- Occasionally I'm clever - Most of the time I'm lucky if anything - Thank you Martie- Some might suggest 'tis only a flash - but I'm sure you're too young ~S~ I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you Liz- I gather that when you're not writing poetry - you're a sports writer for the Philadelphia Daily News or the Inquirer - if not your missing a lucrative source of income  Come on back with your own - so I can try being a sports writer |
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