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Blue Jay Rock (Double Acrostic)
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Blue Jay Rock (Double Acrostic) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Sometimes, when times are tough, you can still find things to laugh about, and so this little poem. Sorry I tried to bold the the first and last letters but it didn't copy correctly Blue Jay Rock The Blue Jay never learned to calmly perch He sits upon the rhododendron tree Endlessly he twitches with a lurch Bouncing wildly with endless glee Little Blue Jay rocks and rolls so well Upon the flailing branches down and up Every bungling movement clearly tells Just how ridiculous this little chum And I prepare to hear his epilogue Yearning for that final squawking jewel Relishing his jabbering hoop-la Oh, little Blue Jay how I envy you Contented in the early morning fog Kicking up some havoc til you’re through (He helps me laugh) Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 09-15-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
That's so clever! Acrostics - done well - aren't easy... you however have succeed very well indeed. Hugs Lizzy...those little things really help hey?  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, this is wonderful work... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Liz, This is a well crafted poem and fun as well. As my grandson's name is Jay I'm going to keep this for my library. Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Wonderful writing, But I know you can do anything you set your mind to. Sy |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Much applause Liz...not only very well done but double to boot!! jwesley |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Elizabeth... Loved this one, and I'm a big fan of blue jays!! They have such unique personalities.....such fun to watch!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz - Why am I not surprised that you would take on a double acrostic - is there anything you CAN'T do? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Severn, Thanks, dear, you words are always warming Sudhir, reader of the entire forum, thank you Kethry, THanks for introducing this form to me. It is quite difficult Sy, so nice to see your name again. Thank you for your kind comment jwesley, Glad you liked it, you seem to understand the difficulty Sunny1, Blue Jays are most commical to watch.They are very greedy at the bird feeder, and very picky. Longjohn, Thanks for reading my poems, whether good or bad, you always have something nice to say Liz |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well done Liz! A double acrostic with a cute little character as the subject ... loved this! I could sit for hours and watch their antics. Each time my little blue boy flies in, he nearly knocks the feeder over. He's a hoot! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WOW....wonderfully done and I am glad he makes you laugh....Liz shines again OR is that STILL never dimming at all. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kit, They are characters, and this was fun to write but vary challenging. Thank you. Mark, I'm trying very hard to shine But I love to laugh, and I can do that anytime. I just can't seem to write Thanks so much Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz - You've proved what I concluded for some time - as was said above - You can do ANYTHING you set your mind to - and do it with a real Santos flair |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you Wilfred. I can use a cheerleader right now. It's been very hard to write these days, but friends like you keep me going THanks Liz |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Elizabeth, Wow.. you make this look sooo easy Very well done.. it made me smile. I know the feeling.. the past week or so writing has been a trouble of mine too. Just be patient.. the flare will return.. not that I believe you ever lost yours rp25 |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it, Elizabeth... You're so durned versatile....  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rosepetals, You're so sweet . Thank you for reading and commenting Nan, Thank you for sprucing up my acrosric. I'm sure it was you. I'm glad you liked it, though it is a little forced, but very tough to rhyme a double acrostic THanks Liz |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is delightful, Elizabeth! I could feel the joy that the little guy gave to you! Very creative poem, too! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Who are you kidding.....your writings are all liked they have been kissed by the angels of wisdom and imagery. YOU My friend write like I would love to be able to. |
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