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The Heart of the City--Tuesday Night. . .
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The Heart of the City--Tuesday Night. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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full moon casts its glow over the heart of the city as I walk the street alone siren in the distance wails a song too often heard but it's not as loud as the screaming of my heart the screaming of my soul what do I have to scream about? isn't this what I wanted? yes, but to acknowledge failure is, perhaps the greatest defeat to have given your all and yet come up short doesn't make it any easier the wind whispers or do I think I hear it whisper? these days I'm not so sure the fountain dances colors changing like the wind I think I hear pattern changing is my life changing? it's Tuesday night in the heart of the city the sirens still wail. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 09-15-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
John--there is such a pervasive loneliness about this piece...as I used to (most dangerously) do the same thing...but every step, is a step onward, yes? You caught the heart of aloneness in a crowd here...and I understand. Smiles. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Even the sun fails to shine sometime..  |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
the wind whispers or do I think I hear it whisper? these days I'm not so sure -------------- Very heartfelt feelings in this piece. Wonderful poem Sven. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
ah, this one aches Sven...i feel your hurting from here. another fantastic poem, cant wait till the Wednesday night edition. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I think you should try the "heart of the city" on a Friday night!!! LOL  I like the style you are developing Sven. Wonderful writing. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Oh Sven, I know this feeling all to well... you have expressed this so sadly, but so nicely done....I could actually hear the wails of the sirens....be well Greeneyes~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, thank you. . . I know that you are all too familiar with this. . . thank you my friend. . . Victoria, but it also mananges to rise again. . . thank you. . . Eloise, thank you Dawn, Wednesday night coming soon. . . thank you. . . Marina, I'm getting there. . . thanks. . . Greeneyes, it seems that a lot of people do. . . thank you for your words. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ This is just a lovely piece. I can sense the lonliness in it ... 'what do I have to scream about? isn't this what I wanted? yes, but to acknowledge failure is, perhaps the greatest defeat to have given your all and yet come up short doesn't make it any easier' You got that right. Great read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This is deeply rooted in the sadness of lifes ups and downs. Thank God when we can dig our way out to see the sun shine again. Deb |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"the wind whispers or do I think I hear it whisper? these days I'm not so sure" Perception of life...are we living, or simply pretending to live...? Wonderfully thought provoking composition, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh Sven I too know the feeling of feeling like a failure and I felt your pain in this. Those walks are gonna get easier, trust me. Such a beautiful piece here my friend. Juls |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marge, thank you my friend. . . sometimes the lessons come hard. . . Blooming rose. . . yes, the sun will rise again. . . thank you. . . Claire. . . sometimes I do wonder. . . maybe I'll find out one day. . . thank you my friend Juls. . . thank you my friend. . . I hope so. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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