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I am Melting
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I am Melting |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I am Melting The sky is a slate and I am drowning in air, the cement cries a soprano whale song from my water of the wilt into dry dirt tears. The nectarines are hiding under green umbrellas, the gold fish are down in the dark belly of the pond, the sunflower is bent and broken, the birds are panting, poetry even melts like last nights candle it folds and splays and slithers across the table as the sun burns white and the clouds billow around the mountain waiting for upheaval. I am melting, the words slide in my mind I am to slippery to hold their flame, it burns holes in my quiet space as I dangle over the still lake of reverie and so I am undefined hot wax I hold no form and the sun taunts my need to write with a lethargy of spirit that refuses to sing. |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Martie, The imagery you project in your poetry is simply incredible, as is this. Bonnie |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, as always, I enjoyed your "waxing" poetic, my friend.  ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another excellent poem, Martie! Wonderfully done! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie, gal~ You 'melt' so cunningly ! This is poetic paraffin ... par excellence ! You put the flame to the wick ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I know a lot of you guys are used to this hot humid weather...and I can now sympathize with you...we are having black outs, brown outs...or lightning strikes and very muggy weather...thus the poem...thanks for reading my heated melodrama.... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, you're hot even when....you're hot! I feel that way about old flames.....  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your muse seems to be enduring the heat quite well.....must be from the south.lol This was a wonderful piece and I knew coming in, it would be, as you offer nothing less than beauty in every one you bring to us. Loved it. (A FAN) [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
Wow- how do I start? I can say there are several beautiful metaphors in this piece, and they display so much emotion. I feel so much longing..it seems your words are even melting as you write them...beautiful piece. "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
even with a melted muse you are amazing.. very cool poem my dear... only you could write a cool poem about a heatwave.. later-hot-stuff-gator jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think you are....are you ready for this? an all temp-a-cheer poet... wonderful writing Martie I love how you adapt your poetry to your situation. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Martie~ Such wonderful imagery...fantastic writings Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This is shear beauty. Fine and arresting imagery. Regards Jon [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I hold no form and the sun taunts my need to write with a lethargy of spirit that refuses to sing. .... What a perfect definition of a perplexed state of mind... Martie, with such brilliant imagery, you could come up with a great poem with such ease... ah! but you always do... regards, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Fan---thank you for your words that always manage to make my day! Balladeer...I was going to say, I am hot for you, but might be taken wrong, you know, so I'll just say thanks. Jennie Mae--What a wonderful thing to say...thank you! Janet--thanks, my friend...I hope your computer problems are better. ethome--that was great...tried to think of a clever right back at ya...but, I guess it's too early. Oh, how about...I may be hot, but at least my clothes are clean? Tracie--I'm so glad that you liked it, thank you! Jon--A very nice compliment, thank you! Sudhir--You are so sweet...thank you for that! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand |
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