Open Poetry #9 |
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Hold you (sonnet) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware ![]() |
![]() When you're weary, worn down by cares When you don't even want to climb the stairs Come to my arms; let me fold you inside Safe let me hold you, from whatever betide When life's a joy, full of most happy thoughts And your laugh bubbles up, in love you're caught My arms crave to enfold you; I need you as well Your loving presence can make my heart swell Sometimes we both want each other so much Long for the closeness, require the touch Only a kiss can relieve all longing Wrapped in each other where we're belonging Let loose the words let them spill out all over Comfort we'll find then lying in clover ~Sometimes what seems like surrender isn't surrender at all. It's about what's going on in your own hearts. About seeing clearly the way life is and accepting it and being true to it, whatever the pain, because the pain of not being true to it is far, far greater. ~ Nicholas Evans ~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--You have let loose some beautiful words in this sonnet, my friend....and such tender, loving thoughts...I know I use these words a lot with what you write...but, that's the way it is. ![]() |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is oh so sweet and gentle and makes me yearn for loving arms to hold me tight |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie - Any nice words - are most appreciated - and yours are always nice ![]() Paula- I can't speak for everyone - but my guess is most would echo your thoughts - Thank you ~The first step toward change is acceptance. Once you accept yourself, you open the door to change. That's all you have to do. Change is not something you do, it's something you allow. ~ Will Garcia ~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I had to say what caught me, and what is me, is quote: than this is it...thank you! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sunshine - your sweet replies - make writing a double joy - thank you |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Come to my arms; let me fold you inside Safe let me hold you, from whatever betide" Bill, this piece seeps reassurance and devotion, and with an almost archaic aire...so very nice. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Claire- Writing in sonnet form - I tend to at least start in 1600's style - but as you noted - I ended the last 2 quatrains in more contemporary style ~G~ Thank you |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent words, excellent thoughts, excellent poem.....good work, sir. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*sigh* yep if only ![]() ~Heather |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Deer - Humble thanks Kind sir - your words are most appreciated! Heather - You should know - my words are current fantasy - based on memories rapidly becoming ancient - but Thank you -'if only' applies to me as well |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Memories are current A sonnet ending in "lying in clover" was inspired by them Very beautiful sonnet Liz |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Wilfred - I like the way you brought this poem to a close with such finality. It wraps up the poem with a clean finish that makes the rest of the poem last after the final word. Geeze - I didn't say what I meant to say, but I hope you get my drift. I enjoyed the poem. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"And your laugh bubbles up, in love you're caught" Seems Sunshine and I are on the same wavelength Wilfred! This line above simply jumped out to make me smile, beautifully complimenting the reassuring and loving sentiments enwrapped within the full verse. Just lovely! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
You know I love this as well....*S* have missed your words... ~LC~ Your aroma still lingers when I stand there, still on soft ground, still lingers as the ocean mist spreads you over me I find peace ~LC~ 99 |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz- Not sure I understand - but I'm glad you liked - Thank you Long John- Yes - I believe I understand - thank you - Kit - I wanted to cover a broad spectrum of the relationship - and that line seemed to express the joyful better than any other I could think of. Green Eyes- got 2 for 2 replies from you - feel like I'm batting 1000 - ![]() |
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