Open Poetry #9 |
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Chained in Sorrow |
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Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774Ontario, Canada ![]() |
Chained in Sorrow Sweet sorrow, will you not depart, Let loose, this grip upon my heart? I mourn the day you entered me, For lost am I, to misery; A darkness grew from your embrace, My essence shattered, laid to waste. You've taken hold, where once was light, And drowned my soul in hapless plight; So deeply buried 'neath my skin, You prowl the depths from low within. To surface then, you do arise, To seep from these unwanting eyes; Too weak to try, too tired to fight, And so these tears, I'll shed tonight. I pray that peace and calm prevail, Though wish I might, to no avail; 'Tis not a refuge to be found, Release elusive ... torture-bound. . /Kit McCallum . [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Kit* This gave a punch right to the heart...your pain and ache created a heart touching poem, it flowed easily and read smoothly. Great writing~ |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're a very wise and very talented poet, my friend... This is a wonderfully crafted piece... I've gotta agree - Don't let the doldrums get ya down... ![]() |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It seemed as I read that there was a bit of a release, I find, as most do, that poetry gives that. Enjoyed. Kathleen |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very well written Kit ... I can't help but feel this one as I'm reading it. Hope your sadness is only temporary ... a tortured existence is the worst of realities |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, this is brilliantly written excellent work... regards, sudhir |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
You've done well with this one Kit. It flowed perfectly. Now may those chains be broken and a captured soul be set free! ~Sheri |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi KIT, There's a verse in here that jumped out 2 me... 'So deeply buried beneath my skin you prowl the depths from low within' I'm touched by your poem... ![]() ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I just knew that if I wailed long enough and loudly enough, someone would find a way to express my feelings. *G* What's that? You didn't know you were writing it for me? LOL. This is great, Kit... wonderful reading even if it did hit home. *S* |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Kit, Those chains that bind and take hold will loosen the grip when we let go and give it to the one above who touches with his love. Powerful writing, your words really hit home to some pain from my past. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Butterflies: Right from the heart it flowed Butterflies, thank you. ~Nan: Thank you Nan ... I try not to, but it sneaks up on me certain days ... thanks. ~Kathleen: I'm glad you enjoyed Kathleen, some release it gave, but not enough some days. Thank you. ~Rex: And a rotten reality it is some days Rex. I do thank you for being so sweet. ~Sudhir: Thanks for the "excellent" Sudhir. I'm grateful. ~Irie: Thank you Irie ... I do hope so too, thanks. ~Coco: Thank you sweet Coco, I appreciate it. ~Suthern: Perhaps we're living a parallel existance Suthern ... thanks so much. ~BloomingRose: I appreciate the wise words BoomingRose, I will try to heed them. Thank you. Much appreciation to all, from a "had a bad week", Kit |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sorrow can be a very strong chain, indeed. Wonderful expression, Kit! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kit, excellent writing, my friend. Sorrow is, indeed, all you have so incredibly described here, and to be "chained" is such apt terminology. This piece, though "sorrow"ful is still at once "beauty"ful. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is so wonderfully expressed Kit. What a wonderful talent you have. ![]() |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent writing, powerful feelings expressed so very well! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*~Kit~*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* You touched blue with tenderness. *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* If *Hugs* help ... have a heap ... *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* *Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Sorrow can be a powerful emotion indeed Kit...deeply sad and moving words here, keep up the great work my friend! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, my admiration for your writing ability grows with every new poem of yours...this is excellent ![]() |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Denise: Thank you Denise ... it can be strong indeed. ~Claire: What lovely words Claire ... thank you for the "beauty"ful. ~Eloise: Such a wonderful compliment, thank you Eloise. ~EagleOne: When this hit so powerfully, it's difficult to stop them ... thank goodness for this therapeutic pen. Thank you EagleOne. ~Marge: Oh, I need that Marge! Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Hugs back to you. ~Krista: Thank you so much for the kind words Krista, much appreciated. ~Balladeer: I treasure these words from you Michael, thank you so much. Much appreciation to all, for helping to lift my spirits, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hugs from this cowboy's arms out wide As he rests his hat on the table of grace A walk he would take with friend at his side Trying only to put a smile upon your face Heartfelt pain in this one my challenge accepted friend......The hugs are real so take them as you need them. ![]() |
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