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Talking Shadows ... My very first duet... honoured greatly by Brian... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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It was a most exciting venture with Brian, who graciously agreed to write a poem with me... and added his brilliance so well, that my words actually started making sense... He is a great writer and a pleasure to be writing with... I am quite sure that there will be more avenues that we could visit, Brian, my friend... and I hope that they will be soon... --------- Talking Shadows... Empty streets align themselves along the foot paths shrouded in dark, on a blacked-out eclipsed night. Guilty pain weeps from the sidewalks bleeding from yesterday's wounds as memories come flooding back, unwinding spirals of doubtful starts -- quizzing emotions at life's crossroads. To love and with patient desire from greatly distanced far-way existence; Or to drain the dream down right now, and scour the shadows alone wake only to veins of ice and the silent howl? There are no horizons that align us -- she is, of the wind, a storm of intense adulate fading, in brief interludes, to a faint breeze. I am to myself, her impact marks -- all skin and nerve thrown back drowning and pulled under by her fires. Yet with all our fears and naked faults and barriers great and extending out, we are of the same fountainhead -- lost children in renaissance paradise, casting shadows where we bathe and yearn. As the long walk thinks itself to an end, the eclipsed moon, now, in her coming to view, from crescent to full - her form in a change - the fortnight of yesterdays seems to run away. 'Every bright day has a darkened night', my new-formed shadow was in its suggest; 'and each eclipse is followed by the shine of hope', I add as an afterthought, hinting a flash-bulb smile. ------ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Clapping here! Much applause to you both Sudhir and Brian! This is a wonderful duet of complex thoughts and enlightenment ... a lovely collaboration you have penned here! I do hope there will be more, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ and Brian~ Wasn't sure what you two talents would come up with, but knew it would be a full palette. It is just that ! 'There are no horizons that align us -- she is, of the wind, a storm of intense adulate fading, in brief interludes, to a faint breeze.' 'we are of the same fountainhead -- lost children in renaissance paradise, casting shadows where we bathe and yearn.' Just the oozing talent of two minds. Enjoyed ... hope there will be more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
When two minds of compassion meet delivery of poetry soon complete meets the nexus of living sweet when two mind of such passion meet. O Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, Thank you so much... I think there will be more.... *bowing* and full of smiles Marge, Ever so appreciative... Thank you, my friend for your kindest words... O Kethry, This is most tremendous response... Thank you so much... regards to all, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To love and with patient desire from greatly distanced far-way existence; Or to drain the dream down right now, and scour the shadows alone wake only to veins of ice and the silent howl? There are no horizons that align us -- she is, of the wind, a storm of intense adulate fading, in brief interludes, to a faint breeze. I am to myself, her impact marks -- all skin and nerve thrown back drowning and pulled under by her fires. Yet with all our fears and naked faults and barriers great and extending out, we are of the same fountainhead -- lost children in renaissance paradise, casting shadows where we bathe and yearn. As the long walk thinks itself to an end, the eclipsed moon, now, in her coming to view, from crescent to full - her form in a change - the fortnight of yesterdays seems to run away. 'Every bright day has a darkened night', my new-formed shadow was in its suggest; 'and each eclipse is followed by the shine of hope', I add as an afterthought, hinting a flash-bulb smile. ====================== when i saw you two had wrote together... i couldnt wait to let me eyes feast on this thread... knowing both of your grace for imagery with depth of intense emotions .. I KNEW I was in for a delicacy .... I was NOT dissapointed ... call me SATIATED  call me content ... call me a poet envy doctor LOL  WOWOWOWOWOW you guys ROCK.... ENCORE ENCORE ... dont make me beg ... I got strong persistant knees (hehe) awesome, awesome innovative work here..take a bow... later-way-cool-gators love ya both' JM |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Janet, So glad ... glad? I am thrilled to see you here... and I am flushing and blushing reading your praise-filled response... Thanks a lot... means a huge deal... regards, sudhir |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Sudhir, (and Brian) "casting shadows where we bathe and yearn" Complex and requiring concentration, yet delightful and so well done. I enjoyed it a lot. Take care Linda M. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Sudhir, Now I'm laughing... you're following me around in here...lol I had to come back and say hi... thank you for your oh so encouraging words in response to my last three poems. And may I say that you are one of my favourites. Bye for now, Linda M. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
you two are unbelievable! this one will be one i'll read time and time again in order to absorb it all...i look forward to more by the both of you! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Hello Sudhir, my friend ... like others above, i knew this one was going to be rather interesting and you and Brian have not disappointed ... flows so well, none would ever know there were two authors ... Bravo to the both of you ... Well done. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
WOW!!! I am very impressed. You two are like the dynamic duo!! LOL Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Linda, Glad to be there amongst the favs... Thanks and two times too... Dawn, Thank you for coming by and your kind response... MA, so glad that we could write as you expected us to... Thanks for your words of praise... Marina, dynamic duo...  Thanks for your kind words...Regards to all, sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Hi guys, I am using a very restrictive internet service, also feeling a bit down at the moment, sorry I am moaning here, but firstly thank you to Sudhir for approaching me with the idea of working on a poem together, in fact I curse myself that we did not do this sooner and I am sure that this will be the first of many team efforts, thank you my friend for honour and privilage of working with such a fine poetic master. secondly thank you to everyone who has read and very generously commented on this poem, it helped wipe away my blues. Thanks again to Sudhir, "Think I'm - I'm lost among the undergrowth So much so I woke up I love you all the same" Manic street preachers You stole the sun from my heart. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great work, brian and Sudhir--so much complex emotion but so easily woven by two pens into one compelling poem. Bravo! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A definite masterpiece by two of the masters. Excellent in all areas...style, imagery(of course)content and flow.....Superb just doesn't seem to say enough. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian, I bow in all humility at the honour bestowed by your words... Thanks for the honour... Martie, thank you so much for the Bravo... Mark, as usual you are lavish with your praise... Thanks, my friend... My regards to all, sudhir |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Very complex, Sudhir! But I loved it all the same! e-mail me again some time...k? ERIN thinks I can expand on my prose a little more...my mind isn't exactly bursting at the seams with ideas....hey... maybe Brian can help..let's make it a trio! ~*~SCG~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Applauding here Sudhir (& Brian)... What a wonderful job the two of you have done with this. Bonnie |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I stand in awe of your amazing talents and to combine them is simply overwhelming... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lavada, thanks a lot for coming by... I will E-mail you on that one soon... maybe tomorrow  Bonnie, I am so thankful to you for your kind words... and applause... Paula, your words of praise move me a lot.... It was most wonderful writing this with Brian... and I am sure there will be more... now just to find the time Thanks a lot... regards, sudhir |
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