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-- Rag Doll --
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL 
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-- Rag doll -- (9-5-2000) My purpose to you seems little more than a rag doll to help pass your idle time You drag me by the arm without caution of what lies in my path My muffled voice little more than an annoyance as the stones break my skin Once the fun is gone you pick me up as if you'd forgotten I was there My knees are scuffed, my elbows are bruised, my eyes are hanging by their final thread You sympathize with my scars but you won't carry the blame A patch of tape to hold an eye in place A little paint to call my scars cleaned A temporary fix to hide the signs of neglect Just enough affection to keep leave me wanting more Just a little effort to keep your conscience clear That's should be enough and back to the ground I go My hopes of love hit the floor through the thin fabrics of my skin My will to live seaps out through a rip in my heart Then I ask myself, are you dragging me? Or am I holding on? So next time you find that the fun is gone and boredom sets in You'll reach out to find only shreaded memories where I used to be --Dave ** Bleh.... this is what I used to write when I was trying to form an IDEA for a poem.... now it's the closest I can seem to get to a poem. =) Maybe I'll work on it some more later. **< !signature--> "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WN~ this is amazing.......I wouldn't change not one word.......truly.....  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Unfortunately I could relate to this...sigh. And if it should be re-worked, it's done when YOU are happy with it. As to the other, it's done when you unhappy with it. Much luck to you on both. Thanks for the read. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I'm feeling a little bald from getting dragged around myself...You touched my soul with this one...a piece that touches someone is poetry...Excellent work~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Dave -- I think this is a great piece. I do believe I can relate to almost every line. Never thought about it in quite this light before. I love when I come across a poem that is fresh and sheds a light I've not seen before. Excellent work! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
(grin) Glad I could shed new light on an old pain..... I think.  Anyways, as I said before. Check out my homepage for more. This is not one of my best by far. Thanks again Angel! Look forward to seeing more of your work too.< !signature--> I wear my heart on my sleeve to show the emotions that I can't express with words. --Dave [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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