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When Daddy Braided Her Hair
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When Daddy Braided Her Hair |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
When Daddy Braided Her Hair < !signature-->First day of school and dressed to perfection As tears begin to well in Daddy’s eyes He lavishes her with all his affection But he doesn’t want her to see him cry And lovingly, he begins to braid her hair “Is there really a Doggy Heaven?” “ And why did Simba have to go?” Many questions when you are only seven “Yes, there is, and now he frolics to and fro And soothingly, he begins to braid her hair Finally today she can drive on her own And smiling he hands her the keys Now she will never stay at home As she is as free as the breeze And proudly, he begins to braid her hair Sobbing fiercely she leans on his chest As he holds her like when she was little He wants her home and she knows it is best As she is shocked by his bones so brittle And smiling, he begins to braid her hair “I know about Granddad, my Daddy told me” How quickly this three-year-old grew wise Picking her up, I placed her on my knee And looking at her I can see his blue eyes And instinctively, I begin to braid her hair Marina Sept. 6/2000 In memory of Ronald Crossley 1938-1997. With love always..... It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Marina, This is by far your best work.....very far!!! Take care m'friend |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, very moving piece. great tribute.. And very well done. James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marina I love it when you write like this. This is written with the depth of dreams that we would all like to have. Your pen and your muse treat you well this day. Beautiful and full of loving spirit.  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marina--This is such a tender and love touched poem...just beutiful! |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Beautiful poem Marina. I think my first born should be a girl.  --Dave"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Absolutaly wonderful. What a beautiful tribute |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
I loved it very much Marina, great poem, very deep... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marina, this was a very special poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marina this is a lovely piece of your heart on display here...soft and loving message...James |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you all very much. This poem means a more to me then words can say. It isn't very often that I allow myself to expose this much of me. Particularily about my father. He was a wonderful man who's love has continued beyond the grave. Jeffery, thank you very much my friend. I hope I am getting better! LOL James, thank you. I hope he likes it. Mark, thank you, your kind words mean so much Martie, thank you. It came from the heart. Dave, thanks, but girl's sure to come with there share of worries!! LOL One Who Understands, thank you very much. I am glad you think so. Lm, thank you Kethry, yes it is to me......thank you James, yes it isn't often I show so much of myself. Thank you very much my friend. You know your posts always mean so much. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Marina - This is an incredible poem. It touched me very deeply, as I have daughters of my own. Unfortunately for me, I never learned to braid their hair, but I did learn to impersonate the voices several Sesame Street characters, which I would then use as I read bedtime stories. I think that counts a little. I hope so, because in another few months I'm going to have a granddaughter. A wonderful poem, Marina. Thank you. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
This is perfection my dear, and I understand how much it really took to write this..... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As she is as free as the breeze And proudly, he begins to braid her hair Sobbing fiercely she leans on his chest As he holds her like when she was little He wants her home and she knows it is best As she is shocked by his bones so brittle And smiling, he begins to braid her hair “I know about Granddad, my Daddy told me” How quickly this three-year-old grew wise Picking her up, I placed her on my knee And looking at her I can see his blue eyes And instinctively, I begin to braid her hair ==================== *smiling thru misty eyes* ... ya got me with this one my girl ... I got a "warm chill" down my spine when I read those last 2 verses.... amazingly honest and hearfelt work he shines thru you and your gift... your words do him justice with grace .... perfection from your poets pen my friend ... love ya -gator-girl JM There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
LngJhn, thank you very much. I am sure that your daughters and soon to be granddaughter, will always remember all those little things. Thank you again. Michael, thank you so much my friend. What would I do without you?? Jan, you always know just what to say. Your response brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much. God I miss our gab sessions!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply beautiful Marina. . . I know just how much your Father meant to you. . . and his spirit still lives inside you. . . This has to be one of the best poems that you have written. . . excellent!! -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
may say what a loevely piece u have here...i especially enjoyed the braiding line that, sorry for the pun, tied up this poem and a fresh idea too, not too many poems out here in passions of this nature..thank you for this read...truly an inspiration."my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sven, thank you. I hope it always will. Juls, thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This poem that means so much to you has ... I'm sure ... meant much more than you know, to many people such as myself ... I have braided my daughters' hair ... countless times and catch myself repeating phrases and setting examples that my parents and grandparents used many times. Thankyou for sharing this beautiful poem Rex |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Marina* This is so very touching and beautiful...your weave has touched my heart today **shaking my head in amazement of your talent**...superbly written~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is one of the most wonderful poems I have read from you... such a beautiful poem, the right touch of sentiments and emotions, evoking many smiles and tears at teh same time... all in all in one word MOVING... Marina, I offer you my regards, Sudhir |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Rex, thank you for reading and responding to it. I think we all tend to follow childhood examples. Holly, thank so much. A compliment such as that coming from a poet such as yourself means a great deal to me. Sudhir, thank very much my friend. I am glad to enjoyed it. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Oh Marina, this was very touching. Poetry from the heart is the best. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I've had my eye on this poem for a while and kinda stood away... I realize now after reading each verse outloud it would indeed touch me in a special way... My compliments to you for touching thru a screen with your poetic expression towards this reader over here... A very very heart embracing read Coco |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Kitkat, thank you very. I am glad you enjoyed and it did indeed come from my heart. coco, thank so much much. I am glad you took the time to read it. Your post means a great deal to me. Thanks again. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Just me again...I neglected to add this to my library...shame on me!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marina, what a lovely, thoughtful and touching tribute to someone who was most likely the world in your eyes. It's hard to put it all out there for the rest of us to see, but we are all so glad you've shared that part of you with us. Thank you. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marina- this is beautiful...and so touching. your love for your father really shines through in this. thanks so much for sharing this with us. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes |
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Bustem57 Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 98 |
That poem hit home!! I have three girls and the youngest is 16. Oh how the time goes by and then they move away. My oldest just moved to her own apartment. I am feeling quite old!! Thank you for such a wonderful poem!!! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Very beautiful poem and touching to read. This is for you Marina. _____________________________ A love that lasts forever Stays in your heart forever Given to each other in need Is remembered in times of need No one can take it away Even if one goes away Sweet memory of most wonderful love Lives forever in you with love A love that lasts forever Lives forever in you forever A love given from dad Lives forever now called granddad And this love will be shared forever……. _________________________________ |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Holly,thank you. A great honour for any poet to receive. Thanks again. Sunshine, thank you for taking the time to read to to post your comments. They are very much apprecaited. Vicky, thank you .....i hope so.... Bustem, thank you. It is truly amazing how time does pass. Insect, thank you for that beautiful poem. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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