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In The Between |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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In The Between Summer is drying up and blowing it has withered and drained the moisture from all the blooming, but the sunflowers still hold their heads erect, they have had their dip and bow, now time is waiting to seed and the bees hover around their dignity. Each minute is crisp with waiting the crunch of falling, and it happens so fast, this precious movement into dry leaves and the ending of nights under stars covered only with mosquito netting. To splash in a midnight’s naked pool with stars to watch and the moon portraying the curved breast of frolic where fairies hide their winsome wings, quietly behind the lattice they entwine their pointy toes to capture bliss. And in the between I dare dream of falling and turning gravity’s pull, falling into the stars like a wish to dance with destiny in candle light, a dream weaves threads that stitch me to the fabric of my reverie, its truth is nebulous and a whim can send it crashing to shatter all the pretty pieces. How quiet this minute that gathers me and waits to see what happens, and it happens so fast, this precious movement into dry leaves and the ending of nights under stars covered only with mosquito netting. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Your words,...*sigh*, so smooth. Such images you portray, and thoughts and feelings you evoke. The title says so much as well, it's perfect for what I feel this was saying. Take care of yourself M. *Peace. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very beautiful, Martie....... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
'A dream weaves threads that stitch me to the fabric of my reverie,' Wow! This verse just jumped out at me! Beautiful, beautiful poem, Martie! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ My stars, woman ! 'To splash in a midnight’s naked pool with stars to watch and the moon portraying the curved breast of frolic where fairies hide their winsome wings, quietly behind the lattice they entwine their pointy toes to capture bliss.' I've never seen the likes of it ... you are simply ASTOUNDING ! This isn't just pretty ... it's exquisite imagery ! What a talent ! Love and admire you. ~*Me*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Truly 'tis a beautiful poem you have given us to savor Martie... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
To attempt to cull exceptional lines from this - is as to decide which Fabrege egg is superior to the rest - yet I try with my subjective mind too keyed to know I lack the talent: "And in the between I dare dream of falling and turning gravity’s pull, falling into the stars like a wish to dance with destiny in candle light, a dream weaves threads that stitch me to the fabric of my reverie," Yes - I dare to dream - and especially loved these words yet you must know your whole poem is publishable quality. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Martie* I always find an oasis in your words... thank you for sharing the gift of poetry that is in your heart and soul~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, With such enchanting words you have so delicately described the "between" ... the Earth's and, of course, our own. Wondrous writing, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
To splash in a midnight’s naked pool with stars to watch and the moon portraying the curved breast of frolic where fairies hide their winsome wings, quietly behind the lattice they entwine their pointy toes to capture bliss. Wow Marge and I must think alike..many times..I loved this verse as I did the whole of your poem today..simply beautiful.. ~~softly Maureen |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Spit Fire--Thank you...you for always saying the right thing...this is a lovely comment. Balladeer--You are short and sweet this evening...thank you for the beautiful. Denise--Thank you for letting me know with a wow..you know I always appreciate your comments. Marge--You make me smile with your enthusiasm..I love and admire you also! Hi Mike...thanks for stoping by for some savoring. Bill--You have made my day with your words so sweet...thank you... Buterflies--I am happy to know that you enjoyed this...thank you for your kind words. Claire--thank you for letting me know that you understand my words...I'm so pleased that you enjoyed. Maureen--You and Marge like the same verse that I do...thank you for letting me know. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So now I know what lies between ME and THERE. I am so glad to have you as my sweet little Jiminy cricket my dear friend. You paint your words upon my hearts canvas well.  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I'm hushed.... I'm just entering into my spring (after a very mild winter...lucky I) - wish it could last... How quiet this minute that gathers me and waits to see what happens, and it happens so fast, this precious movement into dry leaves and the ending of nights under stars covered only with mosquito netting would you like several dots dear? .... awesome K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Martie Magic has me thoroughly enchanted... great.... regards, sudhir |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
So lovely and reads like a song. I don't often read a poem and wish to have written it, but this is one of those times. I wish I had written this. No, I wish I had the ability to have written this poem. So happy to have read it. Alison |
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