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She Awakened Naked and Wiser
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She Awakened Naked and Wiser |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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She awakened naked and wiser in a wink of a kink sewn in the kin of need in her skin she knew indeed the dense Sahara died eden knew the news the muse the weakened knee in kind the weed in the end we'd need the end to waken wiser the wider skew to seek the keen wed wet dew we'd wed keen the wish of wise he'd shied inside the wink he knew the skin side too he knew she knew the wind in hidden heed Sahara died We knew Eden when Sahara died and she awakened naked wiser Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
interesting wording and format this was kewl  ~H |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kewl indeed. This is just so fabulous, with so many implications methinks you'd best page Dr. Freud for me, while I go lay down on the couch. This is a keeper for me, if ya don't mind. Totally blown away. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I am most impressed with this one... Coco |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
muchas gracias poets et al... paging Dr. Freud.... Dr. Sigmund Freud... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
interesting concept... getting wiser while sleeping!... if only that could happen to me... maybe if i tried to fit in a little sleep now and then, it would... LOL... but then again, i'd have to be wiser already to figure out sleep was what i needed.....Wow! ... you got me thinking here... and that could be dangerous... hehe.....  seriously, though, i like this... an interesting way to combine words and sounds and images... you have a very unique and intriguing style! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Reb, Paradise Lost in the concept, methinks. Paradise found in the poem. Be well Keth. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
doreen -- unique and intruiging...hmm.. those are the words used by grammar school teachers when looking at pre-adolescent crayola abstracts??? lolol....j/k thank you -- seriously.... Keth-- I like the twists you found in here! thanks! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
I have read this several times and I am not sure I understand what you did here...but I like it great stuff you got, my poet friend |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
intriguing it is ... Local Rebel... and very well penned too... muchly enjoyed... regards, sudhir |
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