Open Poetry #9 |
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One Last Dance |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England ![]() |
Walk with me beside the sea... Let me show you what will be... Even though your touch is make believe.. In my dreams you are so real... Flesh and bone is what I feel... amd every night you promise not to leave... Take my heart, then take my soul... When I'm with you, I lose control... You are deep inside my shadowed mind... Then I'm yours...you make me see... Past life's stark reality... To where love's rainbow colors start to shine... I don't know...if you care... Or if we're going anywhere... But I know this heart would take the chance... If it is not meant to be... That you take your chance with me... I'll see you in my dreams for... ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
EXCEPTIONAL.... loved the poetic form and the rhyme scheme... regards O sunny1, sudhir |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it alot!! ![]() |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Twin twin twin...this one hurt for reasons best left unspoken...thanks girl for writing my heart |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sudhir... Thank you so....I do appreciate seeing you here, especially today....thank you for your reply!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sudhir... Thank you so....I do appreciate seeing you here, especially today....thank you for your reply!! ![]() ![]() < !signature--> Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 09-05-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Vandana... Good to see you again!! And I'm glad you liked this one....... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula, my special twin.... we seem to be connected by emotions also!! I know the reasons, as they are my own, and they are left unspoken. Life goes on, and so do we, my twin friend!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sunny* The beauty of this piece it awesome... I feel as if I've just shared a very private and special moment...exquisite work~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Butterflies.... Thank you, my friend, and I guess you did share that moment with me. To me, poetry is writing life as one sees it, even with all of its heartache....to be able to share it with a friend makes the hard spots softer!!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sunny this is a poem that really touched me. All your work is great this is exceptional it's beyond great. Well whatever it is girl this poem has it in spades. Beautiful, and so special. Take care, warm hugs. ![]() |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Marsha... I'm happy that you liked this one, and I really appreciate your kind thoughts. Sometimes all that's left is for 2 people to shake hands and share one last dance!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sunny1-I share a dream similiar to yours and enjoyed your words written from your heart. Take care. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Gemini.... I'm always glad to know that there are people to share with, especially good friends like you!! Thank you!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh sunny, this is wonderful! you are bursting with romance lately, and i love it! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Thank you Dawn!!! I do love romance, even when it doesn't do as I wish!! ![]() Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
More romantic escapades, I love this one too. Sweet and oh so understood. Sandra |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Sunny, You touch when you write from that tender heart that you possess. Many words of meaning, many words of hope, and many words of caring. I'm glad I dropped by Sunny. |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Sunny Another FANTASTIC with such emotion and feelings. Great poem. didi |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi catalinamoon... There's nothing like romance and rendevous!! Thank you, my dear friend!! Hi Bill... Oh, Bill, you are so nice!!! It's people like you who inspire me to see the goodness in the human race, and the romance!! I'm glad you stopped by, also!! Hi didi... It's so nice to be able to write emotional verses and there are folks like you who enjoy reading them!! That means a lot to a poet, and I appreciate you!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Man oh man, just lived this one in real life. Awesome writing. Like Garth Brooks sings, "I could have missed the pain but then I'd have had to miss love's dance" Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Cuddlez!! Wow....Garth really is one great songwriter, a master of the craft. I appreciate the comparison, my friend, as that means a lot to me!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~I enjoyed this poem alot!!.. Your writtings get better and better... Great work!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sunny, another awesome poem, so easy to relate to. I think it's time to put you in my library (before it's too full). Dee |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Beth... I really want to thank you for stopping by....always appreciate seeing you! Dee... Thank you so much for your nice words and also for stopping by for a read! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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