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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-09-03 12:32 PM


Sarah

You were but a whisper
in your mother's arms

you grew into the child
I would keep from harm

you were to be a Queen
upon a covenant

Sarah, you were to be the one
I was meant to protect

Sarah

can you be my dream
after all these centuries

can you be the one
in my reveries

should you know my face
will it then be known

you were always in my heart
for you I'll always roam

Sarah

Sarah the name of my heart

Sarah, Sarah
I've now come apart

you were but a whisper
you were to be a Queen
you were to be the one
for you I'll always dream…

Sarah…….


©Karilea Rilling Jungel
2 September, 2000




[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-03-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2000-09-03 05:26 AM


Sunshine
Wow (whispered softly) WOW! (shouted out loud)Amazing!
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Sunshine
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2 posted 2000-09-03 08:41 AM


Kethry thank you...
Nan
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3 posted 2000-09-03 09:10 AM


Very nice, Sunshine - This is a poem every mother has to love - changing only the name for their own personal reverie...
Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-09-03 05:47 PM


Thank you Nan...my brother is looking for some lyrics and I was thinking of sending this to him...
English Rose
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5 posted 2000-09-03 06:00 PM




Such haunting lyrics....very enjoyable!

brian madden
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6 posted 2000-09-03 06:16 PM


you were but a whisper
you were to be a Queen
you were to be the one
for you I'll always dream…

Sarah…….

This one just slides off the screen in a whisper like the breeze through the branches, beautiful and haunting.


Sit down and bargain
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Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-09-03 06:49 PM




You have stretched and grown into this heart many times in your poetry but with this you have reached and allowed me to touch your words.  Great write from one of the best.

Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2000-09-04 09:13 AM


Exceptional ...

Karilea, this is most beautiful work...

regards,
sudhir

Sunshine
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9 posted 2000-09-05 09:03 AM


English Rose, and gentle men...thank you all very much...
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10 posted 2000-09-05 09:13 AM


Sunshine, this is, indeed, a song of the heart, and its music is tender and timeless. Absolutely captivating.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



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11 posted 2000-09-05 12:01 PM


Very nice poem!!!!!!!!
Gemini
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12 posted 2000-09-05 01:20 PM


Sunshine-A beautiful tender tribute of a mothers pride from your heart.
Sunshine
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13 posted 2000-09-05 02:07 PM


Claire, timeless works...thank you...

Thank you Vandana...

Thank you, Gemini...

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14 posted 2000-09-05 09:08 PM


Karilea~
You touch tender with this lovely
piece of your heart.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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Dee
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15 posted 2000-09-05 09:19 PM


The best of everything always comes from the heart.
Dee

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