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You Wrote The Words I Needed To Say
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You Wrote The Words I Needed To Say |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You wrote the words I needed to say in the poem you posted yesterday I read them as I was passing through marveling at what those words could do A memory surfaced in that short time the moment it took to read your rhyme A vision of you dressed all in black a flower for me, held behind your back My prom dress, pink organza and lace curls framing my beaming face Life was simpler at seventeen before we saw all the things we’d seen Then there was war and protestations love ins, peace outs and incantations Children born, grew up, left home and there we were, all alone But your head was turned one last time she wooed you away with silken rhyme Words you claimed I never said touches missed in the marriage bed You stormed out to join your new love in a place in Ohio, I’d never heard of Being without you, I found my peace based upon your act of release I know the lies you held as true were lies that she had fed to you And now you write your poet's plea that life is sad without a ‘you and me’ Ten years passed since you left this place Now I find tears drying upon my face Just fancy seeing your words today you wrote the words I needed to say. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Sharon ... incredible sentiments here. You drew me in to these words, to feel the emotions you so deftly and delicately wrote. Beautiful writing Poet deVine ... very well done and heartfelt!  Best wishes, /Kit (PS...I'm going to pull out Swan Song again and give it another read ... it's been years!) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sharon I find it incredible that you can 'vent' so beautifully -how many drafts did it take? - this poem is priceless! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
What a sad but beautiful retrospective. Such a captivating way you have with the reader, as though you are sitting them down and speaking with them. Your timeline and images move seamlessly... flawless. A truly incredible piece. Trev. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all so much. I was thinking earlier (in the depths of a bout of writer's block) that you all are writing the words I would love to say..you write such great poetry! And then this idea popped into my head. It's not based on fact..just a bit of inspiration from all my Passionate Poetic friends. Thanks! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
My first comment was to be "awesome" and my second "inspirational" and then when I read your comment,...all I can say is "thank you" for validating that we are all inspired by the others here who write from both imagination and experience, for without either, we are all speechless... and by the way, this piece is "priceless"... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Sharon, I am hoping to also draw on the inspiration from Passions as I study poetry and sort out my own personal life. I truly don't know what I would do without Passions! Kathleen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent deVine. . . I know that I too have felt this way. . . I have drawn much inspiration from everyone here. . .it's nice to see that it goes both ways. . . Superb poem. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sharon I don't know how you could say this wasn't very good. This is exquisite!! Beautifully portrayed emotions, very well put together! ~~EXCELLENCE~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sharon I swear I buy every word you write, it is all so real for me...I'm almost kind of bummed---ya mean that there were no love ins and peace outs either? at tell me the dress was real...geez, but you are good. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Never went to a prom....never entered into the 'peace' things...it's all make-believe!  |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I enjoyed this one PdV... Great writing and the flow of verse just scrolled down the screen... You captured the reader whole heartedly! Coco |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i love how writers can become actors yuh i say phooey to smarties that think yuh gotta live it to write it no way...and yuh i didnt go to prom either i wonder what the ratio of poets to non prommers is? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ This was wonderfully well done. Like you, I find much inspiration on these pages. Why, I even scour the basement of the archives to find some inspirational gems. We are wealthy in inspiration from some wonderful poets. *Walt, I'm a 'prommer' - twice ! Now as I prepare to return in October for a class reunion ... I will be able to share so much of all of you with them. Oh, stars ... what if none of them grew up to be a poet ? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sharon, You wrote the words I wanted to say and you wrote them so well, it just made my day. Thanks for the brilliant poem even if it's not real. I find the inspiration from passions also sets me off writing. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
The first thing that inspired me to write was my first visit here at passions It's a great poem, I loved it! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Wow this is a real gem. It's so perfect, I really love it. Inspiration from the masters here has helped me enormously, it's wonderful what family can do. And this is a wonderful family, always sharing their gifts so freely.  |
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American Princess Junior Member
since 2000-08-21
Posts 49USA |
Poet deVine, Just beautiful, sad and sounded so true! I am learning alot since I got here. (I never went to a prom either!) I enjoyed your words.. American Princess It's only me, thinking out loud... |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
Beautiful poem. Enjoyed it tremendously. It pulled at my heartstrings and had me reeling in emotions. Your poetry always brought out so much feeling. Keep up the great writing. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely to read...James |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Whether we went to the prom or not - There's much truth in these words. You do have a way of calling life as it is, PdV. This work is certainly one of your superbly introspective best..  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sharon, To see the one you gave your all turn just to see another, this I know well not so many years gone by but just the same power does fly, the love deeply bedded remains for me, just in a different place and time that only the mind can feel and see. One thing I've learned from my past is just that it's past and now the future awaits my presence to be born of a different seed and may I take the wisdom gained and gleam a different scene. Miss. Poet deVine, As you said others words have an igniting affect bring on memories either put aside or packed away and your poem does just as it should bring feelings in either direction to the for front and give life to anothers dreams, desires, past and hopes. Loved this one friend. And im aware this was not in your life's past but was in mine. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Poet deVine, And to think that I almost kept on going by instead of stopping! This is beautiful, stupendous, and unequivocally touching to me. I am so glad that I did stop. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic writing, Sharon! Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
fine writing, sharon... enjoyed this! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sharon, This was so well written...so sad..you really did such a fine job. Hey, I remember those days. Is my age showing?Best wishes to you! Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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